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Dress Rehearsal
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Dress Rehearsal |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Here I am, pissed off at the world again, walking down the street, trying to mind my own business, whilst I question why I even try to understand life, love or anything else. For a moment I impressed myself with the fact that I made a six line single sentence... But the moment got shot down almost as quickly as you did. Afterthoughts washed away fast by the blood all around, I run to see, knowing the answer already, if there's anything I can do. I hold you there, as time clinches fists, and shout, "Why? Why? Why?", your next and last words branding my soul forever. "I've spent a lot of time doing this and that... getting caught up in the everydays of life. And now I've come to realize that it's not the 'every' but only the 'each' that you get. This is not a dress rehearsal. We each get but one chance to do as much good as we can. So once you let me go, and then you go... Wherever it is you are going, if there's someone there that you truly love, tell them... for I know it will mean the world to them." He closed his eyes, as I intensified my cries... Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere [This message has been edited by Purity (11-02-2005 12:14 AM).] |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Sounds like the streets in a bad part of town. Nice poem. -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Don't you love GIS's reply? Oh my, that made me forget what I was going to reply. I haven't actually been on PIP lately. This is a truly inspiring poem. I want to forget all my homework (A speech on Barbies! Woop Woop!) and write. And I will. Thought-provoking, amazing, first stanza rocks totally, as well as....yeah. Love it. Courts. Hollow. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
you'll never know just how much i can relate to this one...crap, i live in nyc! i was so feeling your first stanza...it rocks, as hollow said. and then, you twisted it to make it be so forgetable. the only importance being the quote. wow. this is bad, i know, but it reminds me of the 9/11 experience, which i was in and lived through. the quote is such a beautiful "we all forgot its truth" thing, that i literally cried when i read it. makes me realize that i don't tell you awesome poets how much i love and appreciate you and your inspiration! good poem! of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep. |
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