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Against You |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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im keeping it all in cause i can't get it out you say you want more from me but i'm giving you all i've got i can't go any further pretending that everything is alright wishing that around every corner i'll be found hoping you won't find out hoping you do i can't let you do this but what am i against you? one fingers strength and something to look at but even with your eyes closed you can't hide whats going on right in front of you and no matter how hard you wish i'm still here going nowhere but who's fault is that? can you find me space inside your bleeding heart? |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
"and no matter how hard you wish i'm still here going nowhere but who's fault is that?" How well I know these words...every day of my life. Thank you...just for saying things I couldnt find the voice to say myself! Until...ali {The Queen of Darkness} "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I don't know why you are so hard on yourself. This was an awesome piece of work. It was honesty, you wrote it from the heart (without meaning to  ) it so worked for you. The end gave me an impression of someone running on a treadmill, running to nowhere. Wham bam with the ending! Perfecto! "We all want to tell her. Tell her that we love her. We all want to kiss her. Tell her that we miss her." Hollow. Courts. Your buddy. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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