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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I'm standing adrift in this wooden thing Here in this sea I'm somewhere... I can't see a shoreline There are no clouds A pedestal and raw, starving vultures One, two... six... eight, nine... Empty stomachs, a pit indeed So wide, so many places to grow Freely without a hammer show Separated, tension, squealing, scream, holler, cry... This thing in mind I'm doing the best I can I don't want the scabs to bleed Be a real person needless Walk the Earth dead or alive Drop the shapes cutting holes Bless the bloods that flow Demon whimpers because he knows Chisel chisel, cut him slow Until you're numb and don’t feel it go Savior, that didn't care Brainless flow into the boat Quick flood, under the blood Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
I LOVED THIS! So brilliant. This thing in mind I'm doing the best I can I don't want the scabs to bleed Be a real person needless Walk the Earth dead or alive Drop the shapes cutting holes Bless the bloods that flow Demon whimpers because he knows Chisel chisel, cut him slow Until you're numb and don’t feel it go that just made me so excited to be reading it! it was amazing. for lack of a better word, perfect. can you find me space inside your bleeding heart? |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Wow, so I guess for lack of a better word "perfect." Thats like a successful and percise military strike. Speaking of military... Thank you -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
To be honest some of the stuff you write gets me confused, like you have all these thoughts running over each other. This poem wasn't like that as much, and it was utterly awesome. Nice. Courts. Saved of course. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
sounds like you have met a fork in the road, eh? |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
As far as thoughts running over themselves... it drives me crazy sometimes, like a random scream of "SHUT UP!!!" at times, while I'm alone... Not always... Just sometimes. But yeah, thank you for the complement. -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Yeah, its a fork with about 5 different prongs. 3 of which are somewhat like plastic floating bridges and the other two are "real" as far as the word itself goes. So yeah. -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
its been awile since I've read your work. I love the flow of this. and the intensity of it. |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
"which way do i go?" only god knows the answer; he'll tell you...his way. that poem rocked, dude. of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep. |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
Hmm and yet again you have made another cup of coffee wonderful... Someone said you seems as though you have thoughts that run over one another... {smile} that isnt always a bad thing... believe me , I KNOW! Until...ali {the Queen of Darkness} "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thank you Lexy. Thats cool, you're from California... Thank you Eve, I love to rock. alibaster- I hope you enjoyed that cup of coffee as much as I enjoyed reading your compliment, and as far as the mind thing goes... it has its moments, lol. -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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