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Mad_Hatter
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0 posted 2005-09-06 04:46 PM



Life goes by too quickly
My vanity is poor
Time becomes but nothing
Please milk me something more
My experiences are slipping
Through the cracks along my brain
Am I a reputation?
Should I know my real name?

I am predetermined
I am undermined
I am self-seclusion
I seek a source for my revision
I am predetermined
To be undermined
Alone in self- seclusion
I seek a source for some permission
To allow me to continue
To, allow me to continue
And pronounce my real name

Should I know my real name?

Come now, borrow all my shame
Unspoken in this staple mateā€¦

© Copyright 2005 Ryan - All Rights Reserved
River
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since 2003-09-16
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1 posted 2005-09-11 01:13 AM


I like the rythm in this, it's solid, should totally be the chorus to a song or something. However I don't really get all of it, what is the not knowing your name thing about? just curious.

       - River

How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse

Mad_Hatter
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2 posted 2005-09-11 06:30 PM


It's about indvidualism.  It's not necessarily talking about your actual name, but moreso who you think you are, and who you are told to be.  Thanks for the reply , hope that helped.
River
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3 posted 2005-09-14 11:58 PM


ok great now i get it, thanks dude, happy un-birthday!

             - River

How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse

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