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littlewing
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0 posted 2005-08-22 05:00 PM




You lie,
suspended.

Enduring foul wind.

Ancient, yet bursting.

A garden borne,
torn between
good and evil.

The towers two.
Your final resting place.

A refuge,
from the stink and rot
of the Dark Lord.

Thickets of bay trees,
groves and glades,
give birth,
to the deafened descendents
from the age of Man.

Redolent brambles of rose
creep among stone basin,
interlocking thyme
with deep tapestry.

Hiding bones
by rocky wall and stonecrop.

Look to the mossy covered
stone lipped hollow, my oasis,
where the streams fall beyond
to Anduin.

Amidst the enemy,
your beauty endures.

_________________________________

*bowing to Tolkien*


© Copyright 2005 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-08-22 05:58 PM


joining you in that bow, Sue


'Redolent brambles of rose
creep among stone basin,
interlocking thyme
with deep tapestry.'

very, very nice!

green_itchy_stuff
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2 posted 2005-08-22 10:46 PM


Wow, I loved the imagery.  A picture is worth a thousand words, so please write about it.  Beautiful.  I think the feeling of just tried to latch on to me though...  Truly some kind of Garden.

-GIS

Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes

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3 posted 2005-08-23 01:14 AM


Nifty! (Bet you never had anyone give you that as a comment?) but it is!  I bow to him too, and you painted this like you were his student Suzie.  Very nice!
littlewing
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4 posted 2005-08-23 08:21 AM


Thanks guys, I am still mesmerized myself by the book I read so long ago, still trying to put all of that into words.  I am glad you guys like, I am hoping I serve his words justice attempting to explain them in my own, what i saw, felt and heard.

Kacy - *smile* my favorite stanza

Craig, if you felt something from this, then my work is done.

Sharon, Nifty, sheesh now I will be SAYING that - bad enough I say Neato!

Thanks guys, much appreciated.

green_itchy_stuff
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5 posted 2005-08-23 02:44 PM


yeah i did feel something from it.  it was really cool.  I still say its beautiful.

-GIS

Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes

littlewing
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6 posted 2005-08-24 08:45 AM


Thanks again, Craig, this book will always hold the last remnants of magic in my heart.
LeeJ
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7 posted 2005-08-24 12:34 PM


to the deafened descendents
from the age of Man.


loved this entire poignant story, and you always tell such incredible stories thru your wise words, but, the above reminds me of what I always think as well, that soceity then, was a lot further along, intellectually then we are now...

Hugs to you for a wonderful journey

Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 2005-08-24 02:23 PM


We have a saying in New York (not that I am a NY'er but I have played one in my past)...

but I can't repeat it here.     

nicely done Sue!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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9 posted 2005-08-24 03:06 PM


Lordy ... well tolkien!!!


CT

littlewing
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10 posted 2005-08-24 05:04 PM


Thank you so much everyone, I really am trying to make these as authentic as I can and it makes me truly happy to see you guys come away with so much more.

Susan,  I am NY too - which is it?
*grin*

Yes, Lee, I have always believed that we, by far, are the less advanced society.

Thanks C.

Thanks guys.

green_itchy_stuff
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11 posted 2005-08-26 09:54 PM


You rock Sue!  

-GIS

Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes

littlewing
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12 posted 2005-08-26 11:22 PM


Thanks Craig, you are so cool, so do you.  Much appreciated.
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13 posted 2005-08-29 11:52 AM


Methinks, Tolkien would be proud.

You've a right to be.

littlewing
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14 posted 2005-08-29 12:51 PM


thanks Eddie, that is a HUGE compliment there.  I am so happy you liked.
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15 posted 2005-09-12 12:45 PM


I feel like a groupie..you never cease to amaze me

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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16 posted 2005-09-15 10:04 PM


Aye,
"amidst the enemy,
your beauty endures"

As Tolkien well knows, even castles have ethereal essence.

Love the dreamer in you.

Billy 8)

[This message has been edited by coyote (09-16-2005 08:58 PM).]

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17 posted 2005-09-18 01:58 AM


Amidst the enemy,
your beauty endures.


Ahh! This ending is so great. I loved this poem, i have missed reading yours.

Keep it up!

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

Jeremiah Johnson
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18 posted 2005-11-11 12:37 PM


you do a great honor here, to one of the greatest writers. the image you portrayed is beautiful and sparks emotions deep within oneself. great job and keep it up. I can't wait to see more.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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19 posted 2005-11-13 09:17 AM


This is awesome Sue!
Always enjoy reading your creations.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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with you
20 posted 2005-11-13 11:47 AM


now...you know I love this   right?
Munda
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21 posted 2005-11-13 05:05 PM


This is absolutely awsome! Great poem, Tolkien worthy.
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22 posted 2005-11-18 03:37 AM


Oooh, this is awesome!  You definitely made a worthy bow to Tolkien--this makes me want to pick up the books and dive right into them once more.

~*Krista Lee Knutson*~

"Creating yourself is a spiritual act." ~ Susan Vreeland

green_itchy_stuff
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23 posted 2005-11-18 04:50 AM


I didn't reread the poem, I just read the comments.  Nice Sue...  JESUS LOVES YOU!!!!

-GIS

Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit.

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24 posted 2005-11-25 02:27 PM


little w , where ya been hiding girly ...J.R.R. is the master indeed , i have loved him since the hobbit , i still have it on the little 45 record story book thingy , turn the page when you hear this "ding" lol i loved those days ...anyhow your poem is grand and well done i shall say .... have a howl and a (((hug)))
and don't be such a stranger these days
~wolfy

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25 posted 2006-01-02 05:56 AM


imagery superb, a wonderful write which I ejoyed greatly.

~hugs~
Tracie

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It is the harmony of the universe



littlewing
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26 posted 2006-01-03 12:30 PM


OMG you guys, I had no idea - all these replies.

Thank you for bringing this back up.

Made me smile.

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