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silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-08-18 04:31 AM


hold me down
envelope your arms around me
etch your brandings into my skin
let the world know what you have
and what they can't take away

whisper sweet nothings
let your words lick my shame
hold me down
in case i squeeze from your grip
and find a way to slip loose

prick my skin
find your own way under
target the pain
hold me down
i'll be fine once the burning is over

let the sensation ride
take its toll
let me rest a bit
but all the while
hold me down

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
1 posted 2005-08-20 10:00 PM


Wow, almost a sexual quality in there. Loved it, glad to see you are writing again. Very poetic. Made my day just that little bit brighter.

Courts.
Hollow.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
2 posted 2005-08-20 10:05 PM


ha the second time i read it i too got the sexual influence.... but it wasn't intended lol

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2005-08-22 02:12 AM


I got a whole lot out of this.  

Love, passion, loneliness, I even saw an addictive aspect to it.  LOTS of goodies in this one.

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
4 posted 2005-09-16 09:44 PM


mmm yes, very seductive vibe. and i can also feel the addiction.

very poetic and thought provoking.

I am a wilted black rose. Searching for cracks of sunlight, to nurture me. And to help me grow.

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2005-09-19 12:06 PM


yeah wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

fully agree with wat LW sed bout this one.

love

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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