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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-08-12 03:40 AM



Hard it seems to fall away
The lights have gone
To play his simple solitude
Shadows shine his heavy brow
And under the sky
His body glows.

His eyes are lucid, fire rips
Broken skin
He can hear nothing
He tells himself
Lights liken to his mind,
He glows,
Everything it’s ok now,
He glows.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

© Copyright 2005 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2005-08-12 04:09 AM


I had to read a few times to get it.  I guess when you wrote it you were thinking on levels that flipped to totally different themes with the same idea so it made what you wrote sound like a far pull here and then another far pull there and they connect so perfectly that you have to really pay attention.  Nice write.  I loved it.

-GIS

Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes

EveGnosis
Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
2 posted 2005-08-13 12:40 PM


"walk towards the light..."

"do not go into the light..."

"all are welcome, all are welcome..."

it's so gosh darn confusing sometimes!!!!!

this was awesome, though. sometimes they shine to make you wonder what they've got. made me reminisce... love ya courts.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
3 posted 2005-08-20 10:02 PM


the ending was sooooo good
this was awesome
espesh the firts few lines of second stanza

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2005-08-22 02:14 AM


I am way out here, I saw a couple of things:

I saw depression, armegeddon, addiction and release.

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