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Dark Poetry #4

something i dont have

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2005-05-28 02:13 AM

i think i have insomnia...
i think its getting bad..
i cant stop thinking about
everything that makes me sad.

It seems i cannot eat
without getting sick...
maybe its just because he left me..
maybe im just weak.

i cant seem to let my self forget.
i cant get him off my mind...
i dont think love is something
I will ever find.

~karissa

**!NOT FINISHED!**

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

1 posted 2005-05-30 03:52 AM

it's lookin pretty good so far...
the first two lines of that second stanza don't seem to click...

but i do like the emotions and the story your telling here. i wanna hear the rest!

we are what we seek

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

2 posted 2005-05-30 03:12 PM

sometimes it's hard to believe in something you can't see, but i'm reminded of the lines from a fave song..."i'll find you wherever you are, you know, i'll find you wherever you go". HE'S gonna find you, and so will love. nice write.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2005-06-01 03:40 AM

I agree with Eve Gnosis. HE is totally awesome. Maybe you're looking too hard.

-GIS

Satan a.k.a. The Stupid Angel

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