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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
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Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2005-05-09 01:34 AM


Just one question I have for you.
Once you realize the depths of my feelings,
Seeing that I am becoming more than just fond of you,
How long will it take you to turn about-face and run?
Unless I miscounted the petals as I plucked them,
As always the answer is you already have.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

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since 2000-04-01
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CA, USA
1 posted 2005-05-09 03:20 PM


This is awwwwwwwwwwesome.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

Beenie
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since 2000-08-17
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WVa
2 posted 2005-05-09 05:26 PM


I have counted those petals many times......thanks for putting it into words!


green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
3 posted 2005-05-09 11:57 PM


I don't think I have anything to worry about.  Comfortably numb.  Nice write.

-GIS

...and the way things are goin, they're gonna crucify me.  -The Beattles

Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
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Canada
4 posted 2005-05-10 12:45 PM


I like the simplicity of it and the length of it.  A small punch, with a huge impact.
Cloud 9
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since 2004-11-05
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Ca
5 posted 2005-05-10 04:01 PM


***big smiles***

this is very cool!!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
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6 posted 2005-05-10 07:01 PM


Alot said, in few words.  You convey your thoughts well in this. well done.
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