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click1
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0 posted 2005-05-04 09:33 PM



I know you are the one for me,
I look into your eyes and see,
It could be lost so easily,
so why don't we just let it be?

All the choices that we make,
None of them are being fake,
It's just the chances that we take,
I know it's you I can't replace.

So strong and good and pure and true,
All of these things I feel for you,
I know that you can feel it too,
Without you here I don't know what I'd do.

Aura or premenition,
All evnvy our position,
you put me in this condition,
do you wonder my intention?

I just can not wait,
All this time is not a waste,
As I look into your face,
But not in a desparate way.

Your eyes,
Your hair,
Your laugh,
Your taste.

I looked for in the past,
Time is going way to fast,
I find my love at last,
The die are cast.
    
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Alicat
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1 posted 2005-05-04 09:44 PM


Yanno, this would fit perfectly in Mature Content/Love for Two, or even Open, Pub, or Haven.  I realize that some post in forums where they feel most comfortable, irrespective of actual poem content.  This one is beautiful, sweet and tender, not to mention well written.  Only 'dark' aspect I could find is the longing, the wistfulness, the desire for something never to be.  Yet again, this could easily fit into any of the aforementioned forums.
click1
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2 posted 2005-05-04 09:57 PM


Life is good...The old ways die hard...I feel an afinity for the darkness that surounds us..a comfort in knowing we exist...

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