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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-03-16 11:26 PM


Fly your kite
If it makes you smile
When a storm rolls in,
And takes a piece of you
With it’s bite.

(Your death was such a waterfall)

Slip on icy shores…
All you ever bled,
Comes flooding back
Stumble on a cliff,
With sweating hands.

(Your death was such a waterfall)

Peel away your fear
I tried to stop
You jumping
I tried to stop
You overflowing

(Your death was such a waterfall)

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

© Copyright 2005 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
1 posted 2005-03-17 12:05 PM


I loved everything about this. It had a certain tone that I liked. Excellent job.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
2 posted 2005-03-17 06:48 AM


Wow...

Laughter Is The Enemy Of Desire, But Desire Itself Is Painful, After You Get That Which You Desire, What's Next?

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
3 posted 2005-03-17 10:50 PM


OMG! i loved this. so amazing! that rocked. your writing is so great to read.

by any chance about a certain type of water? tee hee

laura

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2005-03-18 12:39 PM


ahhh love it as much now as i did when u first showed me it in science........

i wanna be a waterfall

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
5 posted 2005-03-18 09:24 PM


I adore this:

Your death was such a waterfall


Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
6 posted 2005-03-26 01:18 AM


"Fly your kite... if it makes you smile"

YOU RULE!!!!!!!!!

This was awesome in every respect. And like littlewing, I love the multi-use of "Your death was such a waterfall".

Dang, you've gotten dang good!!!!!! (Sorry, southerner in me) LOL

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

Mad_Hatter
Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
7 posted 2005-03-27 04:32 AM


awesome, truly awesome.
vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
8 posted 2005-03-27 03:59 PM


utterly spellboundingly amazing.

I am a wilted black rose. Searching for cracks of sunlight, to nurture me. And to help me grow.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
9 posted 2005-03-28 04:55 AM


WinterWren - Thanks. I'm pretty pleased about this one.

S_I - Lol. Thank You. The response I aimed for.

Lor - Dude, thanks as always. Hmmm....it just could be....

Soph - You are. You flow.

lw - Thank you so much!

Purity - DANG! You rule too!

M_H - Thank you for making me smile.

Kurst - *squee* You make me feel so good. Thanks.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

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