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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2005-02-21 01:30 AM



Your eyes twinkling far away
Musing by what you receive
Someone else
You are someone else
Someone else that isn't me...

A great teacher
An awesome soul
With a twin characteristic
And musically sound

Slipping here to offer you some
Sign off to give to you
Something new
I give this to you
Please take my gift to you

Its not a book
Its not my art
Its something new
From me for you

Watch it die
That breath of death
The breath that brought death to death
Death of death over you
Watch it die

You give to me
So freely
Life without its misery
As for death, lets watch it die,
And then lets just be free

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

© Copyright 2005 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
1 posted 2005-02-23 12:49 PM


"you are someone else... someone else that isn't me"... or even mine, eh?
i feel this to be about a friend far aloft on west coast ocean breezes, but i couldn't help but be reminded of an east coast friend... dammuhnit...i should've said wind and it'd made for a cool poem.

once again, love your words of insight.

always,

mike

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2005-02-23 01:11 AM


I think I'm working on it, but I'm trying to think more of others than myself.  I'm not quite satisfied with this one, but thank you nonetheless.  And yeah it very well could have made a poem.  The west coast or the east with a yeah,... blah nevermind.
Thanks.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
3 posted 2005-02-23 01:32 AM


I was lost somehwere between Mike's reply and your reply to his reply. But to the poem, it was cool. If I'm honest, I didn't like it as much as your others...but then your poems are always so good.
Saved.
Hollow.
Courts.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
4 posted 2005-02-23 01:58 AM


I'm trying to pratice this self-control thing, and feel like maybe I should wait til tomorrow to respond to your response, but you are on right now... ...  Yeah, thank you.  I was going to come up with a poem in response to Mike's response, but I gave up, rather quickly for some reason.  Thank you Courts.  

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
5 posted 2005-02-23 02:06 AM


This is a modest poem of self appraisal.

Only God could've inspired this, and yet left the writer oblivious to the fact that it was the writer the writer was writing about.

No, I'm not Dr. Seuss...lol. Great write, Craig, and so much on the mark for who you are as opposed to whomever you may have written it for. God bless!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2005-02-23 03:02 AM


Wow, I really didn't plan on getting online again, but I've got an idea thats pretty much like "what the...?" and it won't leave me alone.  So I'm here to kill it.  
But as for you Chris, thank you.  The Dr. Sues (not sure how to spell it and for some reason I'm going to opt not to highlight, copy, back arrow at the top, and then after I look forward and paste.  I'm just going to leave it like that.  Thank you again Chris.  I should title this response "Drunk" for I keep rambling like a drunk and the fact that this response is going to be archived for an undetermined amount of time makes me wonder what in the world I keep typing for, but yeah Chris, thank you.  I hadn't looked it from that perspective yet, and that is rather interesting and, you're right, its pretty cool.  Like a sneak up behind and pounce on you blessing.  I think I've said enough, and more than likely too much.  So thank you again.  

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

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