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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-02-20 01:30 AM


I don’t belong
Here
It’s just the pain that resonates
Otherwise, hey,
I could say anything without thinking,
Out of generosity,
I’ll smile.

No one’s looking,
Take a sip from their cup
Of willing.

The sane agree it’s so crazy
That heaven sold out
The night you died,
It should have seemed, it should have been.

No one’s looking,
Think that I knew that?
When you grew and grew and were gone.

We lie awake at night,
Talking by the television light,
And I wish it might
Just be a little easier to breathe.

Dandelions and Bullets.
We hate with an ignorance
Make sense with none, well, so?

No one ever looks
The same
No one ever looks
At all,
Really.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

© Copyright 2005 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
1 posted 2005-02-21 01:48 AM


hey that made me really sad
i love how u can do that
awesome, brilliant i loved it.
and oh yea... you are stellar.

laura

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2005-02-21 08:07 PM


I love this alot. I love the imagery and the way you describe things.
Excellent job, this is a keeper.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

EveGnosis
Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
3 posted 2005-02-23 12:46 PM


"take a sip from their cup...of willing"

omg...

and the lines where you personify the title!
this was awesome, courts...as i realize why i have fallen (very hard and painfully) for your words.

love always...

mike

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
4 posted 2005-02-23 01:52 AM


that was cool.  Its like while you're reading it takes you up from the ground and into the sky and totally changes worlds.  Up the neck of a dandelion and then on the back of a bullet.  lol.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
5 posted 2005-02-23 02:03 AM


"It's just the pain that resonates"

'nuff said. WOW!

Carri

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
6 posted 2005-02-28 06:02 PM


your words are captavating!
and very inspiring.

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