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I understand the girl in the blue dress now...
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I understand the girl in the blue dress now... |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
On a residental block in the middle of july the elderly sit behind stands and serve lemonade. the former children come along and pull money from their briefcases. happiness resolved. they don't have time to create a new generation. and all the teddy bears and plastic cars appeared because the condom broke or the birth control failed. and there's crying at midnight. from both parties. because we wanted this life to be our own. full of music and smoke. full of riddles and puzzles. and now we must teach simplicity. and we've nearly forgotten how. time is infinity and my hand is a stone figure. love is undefinable. my hand in your hair can not get me anywhere. does she outweigh me surpassingly? I wear a blue dress like alice. and in the panthers eyes I am reborn. my thoughts are my breath and its fogging the windows. time is irrelevant. and so are your hands. because they're not mine. [This message has been edited by Lexy (02-14-2005 03:04 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
WOW... Excellent, Lexy! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think you should submit this somewhere Lexy. It's been awhile since I have read you, and oh it is my loss. This IS excellent and oh I am green with envy too. Publish. |
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Red Dreams Member
since 2005-01-09
Posts 90massachusetts |
and now i will read this again and again and again |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
me too.  *shaking my head* this one hit home |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My goodness! The emotions pour from this piece, which is absolutely excellent by the way. I am so glad someone sent me this poem as it also has been my loss missing your work. Know I am in the archives reading you later This was incredible. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
wow... thank you. |
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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
so much emotion bottled by so few words, i find myself unable to describe to you what it means to me, i don't think i want to, i would rather just hold myself and drift off to sleep. |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
excellent as always,your emotions always shine through, I must admit i envy your gift, take care New lovers are nervous and tender, but smash everything. For the heart is an organ of fire |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I told you Lexy . . . *smile* in the other posts . . . |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
"my thoughts are my breath and its fogging the windows." I love this part Wonderful Job peaceful_dreamer "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
um, wow, you're like...a poetic genius...(speechless now)...*add How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Excellent writing Lexy, this hits home deeply |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
i had to read it a couple times to fully form an opinion about it, but very deep. i think i may be a bit too young to fully understand, but i think i got the idea of it's meaning. However i enjoyed it nonetheless thanks " How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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