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darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2005-02-04 03:09 AM

The lowest I have been
Shamefully low
Drowning…
Drowning…
Drowning…
Sinking
I want to sink
Beneath the surface
And shy away from myself
No reflection
In my mirror
No recognition
In your eyes
I won’t let you die
Your hand will still be in mine
Once the grass is growing
Above me
Sinking…
Sinking…
Sinking…
Lower than ever known
No pen to write your name
No laugh to sing your name
My eyes plead
Yours dismiss
My heart yearns
Yours feels guilt
Your photograph
Paints mermories in my mind
Paints tears on my cheeks
Needing…
Needing…
Needing…
Wanting
Your hands
Your smile
Your hair
Your skin
So soft beneath my lips
Delicately tainted
With tears of emptiness
And empathy

Im missing you
Goodbye
I will love you

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2005-02-04 03:17 AM

OMG. soph. i do not know what to say.
that was so effing amazing.
i LOVED IT! OH MY GOD.

that was so amazing and it so fully explained how your feelking right now, oh my god.

love & jelly legs
laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

2 posted 2005-02-06 12:14 PM

omg soph... i whole heartedly, agree with lor on this one... completely.. i don't know what to add..

but yeah, that really just described your feelings so vividly..

i am so envious of your writing!!

love and jelly legs (me to lor!),
Kurst

I am a wilted black rose. Searching for cracks of sunlight, to nurture me. And to help me grow.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2005-02-06 10:21 PM

I don't know what to say. It was so so good. Lemonade limbs. Um, have to take a moments. Will come back with better reply.

Holl.
CK.

tecoyah
Member

since 2003-11-16

Posts 83
NY

4 posted 2005-02-12 09:20 AM

This was exceptional:

Your photograph
Paints mermories in my mind
Paints tears on my cheeks

I must admit I am intrigued by your style thus far.....and the way you use repeat wording. This is the first time I find it attractively placed in a technique.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2005-02-12 11:01 PM

*sinister grin* Could be an epitaph. Oops, did I say that. lol

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

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