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rm711
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since 2002-11-30
Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2005-02-02 06:26 AM


give her an answer
maybe before you go you'll listen to yourself
one more time.
there's only four doors and two windows
you've got one chance
the airport is too far away now

sign in ink rather than just a copy
if you're gonna screw someone over it's gotta be personal
like that.
your hair always smells of cigarettes but not today
and why does the postmark say you sent it last week
we're getting older in this short space of time
and the song is dying from the inside

buy me a freezer to store all this that you're giving me
I want to preserve it but I don't want to know
when it's all done and it's all over
sell me a copy of myself.

you don't see the lights the way I do
if I could find a way I'm not sure I'd want you to
please forgive me for my total lack of need
while you're at it.
find a way to goddam believe

© Copyright 2005 Rosie Mitchell - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2005-02-03 01:34 AM


I'm sure there's something to be happy about with this guy, or whoever.  its a cool poem though.  kinda has a leave you hanging bit to it.  cool though.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2005-02-04 07:25 PM


the song is dying from the inside
sell me a copy of myself.

woah! there is just so much about how this is written that sticks out at me like possesed tree branches. Its phenominal!
Its absolutely real.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
3 posted 2005-03-09 06:45 AM


please forgive me for my total lack of need
while you're at it.
find a way to goddam believe

WOOHOO! Wow, This is Truly Amazing.

"Trina"

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

The Jackal
Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A
4 posted 2005-03-13 11:15 PM


quite an ironic ending, awesome

New lovers are nervous and tender, but smash everything. For the heart is an organ of fire

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