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rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2005-01-25 07:27 PM

I guess I’m like your worst nightmare
If I were on toast
Edible but ugly
I’m here and you don’t want me
There’s nowhere to “go away”

Three times over and a week where no one speaks
I found your hat under the table
There’s no room in here
I’ve stopped breathing
She told a great joke

There’s a horse in that field nextdoor
Take a ride
Fall down
She’ll find you
You’ll score

So where’s the signpost
To lead me away from fire
Where’s the laughter
Where’s the gun

Take your pain a hundredfold
Wrap it in a letter and mail it to never
Three times over in a week
No one speaks
Don’t stop smiling
She loves you now.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

1 posted 2005-01-26 02:14 AM

wow... ummm i am so speechless. this is the best ive read on here for awhile, and im not just saying that.

i dont know where to begin.

So where’s the signpost
To lead me away from fire
Where’s the laughter
Where’s the gun

thats my favourite part, so amazing. oh and btw, ive got your gun.

amazing... utter brilliance

cant wait to read more of your work

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

2 posted 2005-01-26 07:01 AM

Thank-you so very much.
I guess I just kindof rediscovered this site, I haven't posted here in over a year.
Reading through my old work is crazy now.
Everything changes alot in that amount of time.
I'm glad you enjoyed my write.
Thanks.

x

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2005-01-27 08:35 PM

Yeah...wow petty much sums it up. I loved it, and to pick a part I enjoyed the most would be the part D_W already mentioned. Very cool poem.

Hollow.
Courtney.

And the legacy runs from needles to guns
And no one's immune to the pain
From Marilyn to River Phoenix
From Elvis to Kurt Cobain

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2005-02-01 05:16 PM

Your writing has a bite, a realism. I can feel every word. its amazing. please keep posting. its inspiring.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

5 posted 2005-03-09 05:30 AM

Courtney Is Right, WOW Sums It Up.

"Trina"

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

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