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silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-01-20 03:01 AM


i haven't written in a while, this is just me trying to get rid of something so i can say "hey, i finally wrote again"

lightening flashing above
the only light in this dark daunting night
your face is gone
its always gone
i have no memory
of what i thought you were
your voice gone
but the things you said
only take me so far
only satisfy my expectations
for so long

closing my eyes
shows no difference
to the sullen existence
engulfing me
you're arms aren't here
they never were here
and i drift even further
into what i thought was good
what i thought made me happy
when all it did
was darken my chances

*MEH! sorry bout this, i tried, i really did. tell me how you like it, and i'm sure whatever u have to say, will inspire me to do better..

you're the only one keeping me alive

© Copyright 2005 L - All Rights Reserved
darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
1 posted 2005-01-20 03:19 AM


woah so happy to see you back on these boards. loved this poem. kinda sad to read though

so glad ur writing again, you know where to look for inspiration right? ur old posts, music and all these other wonderful talents

love and empathy as always
sophie

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
2 posted 2005-01-20 02:45 PM



"Lightning Crashes, an old mother dies
her intentions fall to the floor
the angel closes her eyes"

The first line made me think of that. Remember, even if you don't like thhis piece, you wrote. I liked it, honestly, I really really liked it. It was sad but it was good, I saw it in slow motion, unfolding before me. I don't know, hehe, see you soon? I have some R.J.P footage you need to see. *tear*

Hollow.
Courtney.

You just got to see me through another day
My body's achin' and my time is at hand
And I won't make it any other way

River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
3 posted 2005-01-21 01:36 AM


ack! I think everyone here is telepathic or something. I feel the same way about someone, in real life...sheesh...well anyways, if you read Heart Fever you'll know what I mean...but sheesh...I didn't think this was bad. (feels icepicks in chest...)

     - River

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
4 posted 2005-01-22 12:24 PM


DUDE... OMG your posts are all just so so so so so so so amazing. i love your poetry!! eek! i'm listening to basket case at the mo, so i'm all "tralalala" greenday makes me so giddy. Mmm.. ..yeah well awwweeessssooomme poem.

love ya lots and lots and lots
KUURRSST
xoxxxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
5 posted 2005-03-09 04:55 AM


I Agree With Kurst, It Is Indeed, Amazing.

"Trina"

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

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