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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-01-17 07:42 PM


Saw my fate
Laughed all the way home,
What a joke.

Take me now
What else is there?
God I hope one day
Scattered ashes won’t be the end,
The eternal river flows.

Saw my fate
Laughed all the way home,
What a joke.

Better they come
In droves
Lay a candle on the sidewalk
You’ve been so blind you have not seen all the colours,
Inside yourself
Even though you’ve been hiding long enough,
Inside yourself.

“You must not know,
How close to the edge I go.”

See the tears form on my cheeks?
I hope you do,
I love it so when your eyes are on me.

Unconscious, you bled,
Conscious you lived,
It would be so much easier,
If there was more blood in our bodies.

Saw my fate
Laughed all the way home,
What a joke.

“You must not know,
How close to the edge I go.”

You just got to see me through another day
My body's achin' and my time is at hand
And I won't make it any other way

© Copyright 2005 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
~K~
Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148

1 posted 2005-01-17 08:21 PM


How close?

I must know.

The edge

calls to
me too.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2005-01-18 02:46 AM


Yeah, the edge is pretty intense.  There is nothing there, but its more solid than steel (for me literally at one point).  The edge is crazy too.  A tightwire.  lol.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
3 posted 2005-01-20 08:40 AM


thee edge is so close for some yet they cant see it for the fog... or they just dont want to see it...
this is a beautiful poem... made me realise how close my edge actually is right now
thanks hollow
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
4 posted 2005-01-23 12:06 PM


See the tears form on my cheeks?
I hope you do,
I love it so when your eyes are on me.

loooove this. amazing!!!

awesome, as usual.

laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2005-01-23 05:07 AM


im so close.

wicked poem

sad so sad but
tremendous

love it and you


l&e

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
6 posted 2005-01-23 08:49 PM


i don't think anyone knows how close to the edge we all go at some point in our lives.

omfg that was so so so sad.. it brought tears to my eyes. it's officially, thats' right officially my new favourite poem by you.

i loved that more than words describe. god damn it.. it is so unfair.. why can't I write like YOU?!!!!  :'(

anywho.. this was one of my favourite parts, and the part that Lor quoted as well.

"Take me now
What else is there?
God I hope one day
Scattered ashes won’t be the end,
The eternal river flows."

Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

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