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EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2004-12-31 11:46 AM

"why do we hurt those we love the most?"
i've snickered at the cliches of life;
haven't you?
now that the cliche has compelled,
just underneath my living awareness,
it's the one doing the smirking
in its "i told you so."

i'm talking to you now.
your reserved right not to listen
is more aware to me than the reasons why
i did what i did
to someone i love more than life itself.

momentary absence of all that i've gained
to lose in one fleeting moment of compelled confusion,
i let myself go, and lost sight of what's most important.
yeah, i screwed up.

repentance, when sorry doesn't cut it,
will only be mine
when the scars on my heart bleed me remember
the cliche that stole you away from me.
i'm left with a cliche that i am very aware of...
"some cuts never heal."

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2005-01-01 08:23 PM

Leaves alot to imagination. Actually answers quite a few questions. Nice write. Chris says my poetry has a underlying feel to it, and this one does as well, like it could keep going and never stop and keep that underlying tone to it.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Ladycat

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since 1999-07-05

Posts 782
At the edge and a doorway,TX

2 posted 2005-01-02 04:52 PM

"repentance, when sorry doesn't cut it,
will only be mine
when the scars on my heart bleed me remember
the cliche that stole you away from me.
i'm left with a cliche that i am very aware of...
"some cuts never heal."
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I think that about says it all. I loved it.

Love,
Ladycat

Insanity in individuals is something rare but in groups, parties, nations and epochs, it is the rule.-Friedrich Nietzsche

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

3 posted 2005-01-08 01:08 AM

It's a shame that those "momentary absences" cause one to frolic in things for the moment that truly cut another.
...And sometimes "sorry" cuts "it" quite deep.
Nice write.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

4 posted 2005-01-08 01:14 AM

Maybe it's just because I watched Ladder 49 at a small movie theatre and balled my eyes out. But this poem is on fire. And like the last time I saw an orange sky, I balled my eyes out.
I snigger at the cliches too, the irony is amusing. Glad to read another one from you,
Hollow.
Courtney.

You just got to see me through another day
My body's achin' and my time is at hand
And I won't make it any other way

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2005-01-12 08:06 PM

Wow...this was awesome..I really liked the second and last stanzas...So great...Awesome job.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

6 posted 2005-01-13 11:23 PM

*wistfully* It's always amazing what turns up when you venture out of your "normal" hiding spot on this forums.

I can really relate to this poem... There's a lot left unsaid that can be taken in any number of ways.

Thanks for sharing it.

~BWA~

Your time is here. Take one last look at it, then never come back. This part of your life is already over...

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

7 posted 2005-02-07 01:54 AM

"When the scars on my heart bleed me remember"

OuCh.

Michael, this was eloquently saddening.
(It was awesome)

Rider

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

8 posted 2005-03-09 06:57 AM

"some cuts never heal."

Isn't That The Sad Truth, Great Write.

"Trina"

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

9 posted 2005-03-09 04:09 PM

nice....

sad but very true.

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

10 posted 2005-05-13 02:42 AM

"some cuts never heal."

Loved this line...brilliant!

~ARH

<i><b>"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take - but by the moments that take our breath away." </b>

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

11 posted 2005-05-13 01:58 PM

"when sorry doesn't cut it"
and
"I told you so"

I had to come back and re-read this. Something in a person just snaps and no, sorry doesn't cut it. And yes, I have had a few people tell me...."I told you so"

I really like this..Excellent

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

12 posted 2005-05-15 01:48 AM

Wow, going for a reread. My mouth feels like some of the Oregon landscape packed with signs too numerous to count. And the only word that brings any kind of calm back in is actually "ouch." Nice write.

-GIS

...and the way things are goin, they're gonna crucify me. -The Beattles

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