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darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-12-15 02:59 AM


Everybody stops caring
When I'm fading in and out
Everybody glances past me
When the tears stop and I begin again
Nobody notices me
When I start smiling again

They all start thinking I've got what I need
They start believeing I don’t need them
When I start trying to live again
They get sick of me
And my screwed up world
They get sick of my silly little problems
And they get sick of helping me

So my world starts to fade again
And I fall further
And stare looking back at all of them
The people I thought would help me
And I stare as they squirm
Nervously, wondering who will give me their hand this time
Whos turn is it?

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

© Copyright 2004 Sophie A Ryan - All Rights Reserved
silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-12-15 03:05 AM


(edited-profanity-Ladycat)
i've been waiting for one like this. so damn good. soph what a talent you have, to convert how ur feeling into something as beautiful as that.

maybe its cuz im listening to hello... or maybe its both ur poem and the song, but gawd dude im sad, tears forming... bloody hell ur great.

love you always, and im here for you next time ur in one of ur upset moments, u can ring me, u really can. you cry, i cry. love you!

LOR

you're the only one keeping me alive

[This message has been edited by Ladycat (12-15-2004 03:58 PM).]

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-12-16 12:29 PM


"You’re too important for anyone
There’s something wrong with everything you see
But I, I know who you really are
You’re the one who cries when you’re alone"


"I’m so sick of speaking words that no one understands
Is it clear enough that you can’t live your whole life all alone
I realize you’re afraid
But you can’t reject the whole world
You can’t escape
You won’t escape
You can’t escape
You don’t want to escape"

This is going to make for a long reply...isn't it? Well I don't care. Because sometimes filling up space makes it easier. Haha, look at me, trying to be profound at metaphorical. Yeah, I'm talking about that void, where you wake in the morning and you step outside and you take a deep breath and you get real high and you scream at the top of your lungs, what's going on? (What's Up - 4 Non Blondes). Maybe someone won't always be there to reach down and pull you back up, but I'm sure I'll always meet you when you hit the bottom.

"And I love you." - River Phoenix. Running on Empty.

Love always,
Just simple ole Courtney.

You just got to see me through another day
My body's achin' and my time is at hand
And I won't make it any other way

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
3 posted 2004-12-16 02:10 AM


.....so good.

and dude, i'm always willing for it to be my turn. whenever you need a hand, i'll make it my turn to be there. hell, i'll even cut in line!

lots of love,
Kurst
xox

Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2004-12-16 05:34 PM


thanks dudettes.

you three rock my world, along with a selected other two.

i love you all so much, and I'm sorry i feel how I said I did in the poem.

thanks for reading, its good to know if i post something at least you three will read

love and empathy always (dont forget it)
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

A Tone of Voice
Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287

5 posted 2004-12-17 10:30 PM


sometimes we need to spill our guts to allow ourselves the space, to continue breathing---

you do good gut spilling....hang in there! *smile*

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
6 posted 2004-12-19 09:35 PM


awesome write. Not your best..only because you have so many others that are...I know how it feels...on both sides...

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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