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peaceful_dreamer
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since 2003-04-25
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SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

0 posted 2004-12-14 02:34 AM


An undying freedom like no other is just a
Grasp away, feeding on forgotten memories
And this sorrowful world. A tragedy unknown
To man cautiously develops following the
Unremembered footsteps to a melancholy place.

An un-won war like an awkward silence has
Overpowered life, killing a boisterous enemy
With one thought in mind - the unknown
Tragedy and every damn consequence.
Follow the footsteps out of war and regain
Self-righteousness.

A failing nightmare like a dying rose has
Begun to regain life behind closed doors.
Afraid to reveal its unknown power and
Energy to this grief-stricken world. This
Monotonous torture destructed the purity -
Causing everything to collapse.

An un-canning coincidence like a burning
Fire spreads to cover the universe.
The diminutive indication means the most for
breaking this cipher and putting out the fire,
yet the desire to explain no longer exists. All
is led to seclusion while the universe burns.

An unwanted gesture like vanished time
Fell in the hands of a monster in the
Deteriorating nightmare that can no longer be
manipulated. The monster progressively grows and
ascends as a vine out of this outlandish trepidation.

An apprehensive conscience like an undeveloped
Person grasps freedom like no other. The
Forgotten memories are thrown into the
Fire of this sorrowful world. The war
Covers the footprints; the path is lost. And
This coincidental nightmare had occurred again.

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

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River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
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1 posted 2005-01-14 11:59 PM


hey! I like this! it's very descriptive and gripping, and I really agree with what you're saying here. great job! =)

        - River

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
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2 posted 2005-01-16 12:16 PM


Thats cool.  You take a very broad approach to a point and never pinpoint, just get closer and closer and narrower and narrower.  Almost a touch, but not quite.  All this while it is specific like a light into a prism and divided into a rainbow.  Thats cool.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

peaceful_dreamer
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since 2003-04-25
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SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW
3 posted 2005-02-13 02:32 AM


Thanks! A lot of people that have read this didn't like it. It's nice to hear some positive feedback.

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

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