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EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2004-12-13 10:16 AM


i sigh, and wish i could have stayed...

memories will hold your hand now,
i know, as you walk along your path.
surely as the day does end,
see the hope that time cannot forget;

you'll see me each eve in the amber
of the sunset, so cry not as it leaves.
until it returns, find comfort in its rest.

before you know it, it'll come alive again,
radiating light, illuminating the beauty
of your path, and bringing you yet closer to me.


of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

[This message has been edited by EveGnosis (12-14-2004 12:05 AM).]

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News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
1 posted 2004-12-14 12:27 PM


I found it funny seeing Morning Light
& then Just As The Sunset in the threads.
Then I read this amazing, beautiful
yet bittersweet poem!
Hey, Eve, after further reading I noticed
the hidden message. Your style of writing
hid it well, but
what is most amazing is the overall flow
of this poem.
My compliments on a keeper for me. This hits home.


"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2004-12-14 12:36 PM


Thats cool.  Its beautiful.  You're an awesome person man.  
Friends,

-GIS

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2004-12-14 10:44 AM


Talk about tears. Wow, Mike. As you would put it, fantabulous! I miss my bro, too, and this is as timeless a memorial poem as ever was written. I especially love it coming from the bro to you. Unique, beautiful write. I want to share this one with some folks that could truly use this message today. God bless. I feel ya!!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2004-12-15 12:17 PM


beautiful yet so so sorrowful

i loved it and love all of your work so much

i light up each time I see your name in the forums.. your poems do something to me

love and empathy always
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
5 posted 2004-12-17 11:43 PM


...Mom says thank you from the bottom of her heart. She still has not accepted the loss of my brother, and just feels he's out somewhere and will return soon. This made her glow. Thanks again, Eve. Great write!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
6 posted 2004-12-18 12:41 PM


*SIGH* woah, now that was cool. what an awesome poem huh? this made me go all shivery, ya no how you do when u read a realllly awesome poem, and u just, ya no, shiver? well, thanks for being the person that made me shiver today!

Laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

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