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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-12-07 09:10 PM


“They say she cuts herself…”
(Do they just?)
These words just add to the mindless drivel
I can imagine that label tagged to my carcass
“Probably not even deep…”
What’s the point in believing?
What’s the reason for your tears?
Would you like another rumour?
Spread like butter through our ears.

“They say she had the equipment ready…”
(Do they just?)
My mind flashes to the shiny weapons of “self-defense”
I can imagine my body bent over
“All because of that person…”
What’s the point in breathing?
What’s the reason for our vicious tongues?
Would you like to lay down a bit?
Don’t have to whimper any more.

“They say she doesn’t like them anymore…”
(Do they just?)
The people you talk about, don’t know my name
I can’t imagine their faces
“She shouldn’t return, for her sake…”
What’s the point in speaking?
What’s the reason for your words?
Would you like to die in the night?
It might be easier.
It might bring them to their knees.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

© Copyright 2004 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
News_From_Nowhere
Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
1 posted 2004-12-08 12:51 PM


WOW...
Speachless.
"Do they just? indeed"
Ouch, yet awesome!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
2 posted 2004-12-08 12:53 PM


why do you always make me cry?
is it maybe because you write about "someone" and that someone may as well be me cus i feel all those feelings and its like im in their shoes (which in some cases is correct).

dont know what to say but this is my favourite of yours. so unbelievable hehe youve come such a long way

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

spritrider87
Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294
NH
3 posted 2004-12-08 10:31 AM


Do they just....yes they do. and yet it is sometimes true. good write and read. i know that i've wondered some of the questions brought up. hope you start too feel better. love Jian

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
4 posted 2004-12-08 11:56 PM


A searing, traumatizing, perfect write. 'nuff said.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
5 posted 2004-12-09 09:23 PM


(profanity-edited-Ladycat)

courts, you are too unbelieveable.

i have no more to say.

def. one of my favs too.

WOW

LOR

you're the only one keeping me alive

[This message has been edited by Ladycat (12-11-2004 07:51 PM).]

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
6 posted 2004-12-10 03:43 AM


(profanity-edited-Ladycat) i don't know what else to say.. ...words can't bring it justice.

love,
Kurst

Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

[This message has been edited by Ladycat (12-11-2004 06:18 PM).]

stevebrklynnyc
Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292
GA, Camden
7 posted 2004-12-11 04:02 PM


Posts like this make me want to read more, there are so many people here who can relate to feelings we all sometimes have to deal with.  Bravo Zulu!  If you dont know what that means, let me know, steve.
Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
8 posted 2004-12-11 06:07 PM


King News - Yes very ouch! Thanks for replying.

Sophilo Pastry - Do I just? Maybe I always make you cry because you always make me cry. It's even more scary, because these things were actually said to me. Thanks for the reply.

Spiritrider87 - Yeah, sometimes it is true, which is sad. Thanks for replying, means a lot.

Purity - Wouldn't go as far as to say perfect, but I'm writing stuff I like again. Thank you as always.

Lor - Hehehe you cheeky devil ( ) I'll see you tomorrow, must challenge you to a battle of singing on David Bedengfield, I see you hold top rank, not so good. Thanks for replying, kind of sad though, that's its your favourite, don't you think?

Kurst - You make me so proud of this write, words can't bring it justice? My dear, by saying that you have. Thanks, lol.

Steve - Well thank you for replying! I get the bravo, the Zulu does indeed baffle me, but thank you all the same

Love all of you,
Courtney.
Hollow. (Swapsies)

You just got to see me through another day
My body's achin' and my time is at hand
And I won't make it any other way

spritrider87
Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294
NH
9 posted 2004-12-20 11:12 AM


no prob. and i have reread your poem a few times. its so much like the questions i never ask im beging to wonder if i should just write them out. anyways....your stuff is so good. your in my privet library...have been for a while. later.
Static

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

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