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Look Down Upon Me
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Look Down Upon Me |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
He can feel the bubbles rising up his throat The sickly stench of guilt and pain Filters his soul, no noise Drifting, he pauses and takes a step towards the fire Can’t you see him tire, and lay his aching body? On the ground He can see clearly now Eyelids hesitate before they breathe a last and shallow glance At all the world He’s seen the rain come The plans they made, they didn’t go so well And now he’s someplace where nobody knows his name A polluted river swirls at his feet It’s good bye again. Note: Stuck in a rut, getting those creative juices flowing. Do not like this much, got no idea what it's about but maybe it will return the ideas. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
I liked it very much. Sounds like a bad "nowhere" to be... Actually a relatable write, indeed. "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
been there and i'm back there again. hope things get better. i'm trying to start my poetry again. hope to read more. Static If you ever want to talk.... spritrider87@yahoo.com As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
stuck in a rut my ass! lol awesome bloomin awesome (teehee) cant wait to talk love and empathy sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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