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Purity
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since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2004-12-02 11:53 PM

I awoke from a disastrous dream
to find myself standing naked in the snow,
feet frozen where they stood.
Upon further provocation of my senses
I realized I was not alone this blizzardous night.
I was surrounded by reindeer with eyes steaming red.
Their antlers formed razor sharp givers-of-gifts
of the death-not-wrapped kind.
Across the way I saw a huge man lying
on once white earth turned life-drained red,
the same red as the suit he wore to meet his maker.
An abundance of worldly treasures I noticed shred
to unrecognizable pieces...
Was it the frolic of reindeer games,
or the foreplay of things to come for me?
Hoofs thrashed at the ground, announced distance
soon to be shortened; what was I to do?
To my left, and I to its right, I saw a dead tree.
Somehow the moonlight was finding its way thru snows end.
As it beamed down and hit that tree,
the absence of light on the other side shadowed a cross.
The Christmas animals of rage charged!
I ran to the shadow, closed my eyes and prayed...

and woke up with a renewed sense of the season.
----------------------
i owe respect to darkness_witch for inspiring!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

[This message has been edited by Purity (12-03-2004 12:05 AM).]

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-12-03 12:00 PM

Are you trying to tell me Santa is evil Purity? or not him, but the animals he raises, the toys his elves create, the food his dear wife slaves over to feed his beergut? Hehehehe, 'Tis the season to be jolly alright. The theme was the entire best of this poem, but it was very crafty, "When I woke up, it was all a dream." kind of thing, but different. Very much enjoyed. Don't you love the festivity of this season though?

And here, I am very much looking forward to summer christmas, with barbequed xmas dinner, swimming, jandals, sunblock, and probably sunburn but what the hey?

Hollow
Courtney

Cool write

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

2 posted 2004-12-03 12:33 PM

holy .... !!!!
now this was twisted, purity. which is to say i absolutely loved it!!! man, what a way to get a message through. first bob and his father time poem of grandeur, then you go and reach the same message by much more dark, gruesome means! this rocked!! (and not around the traditional sense of the christmas tree, anyway!)
you rule!

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

3 posted 2004-12-03 10:58 AM

Now who's the bloody freak?

The imagery here in your words
are extremely vivid.
So much that I would only make
my child read this as punishment
for something very, very bad she did.
& Yet, I only say this in humorous gest,
for she wouldn't be able to see the
beauty of what you are dichotomizing here,
and of what you gain in your sense
after the "dream" is over.
What a dark way to present a message of hope... Great, great, great...

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

Ladycat

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since 1999-07-05

Posts 782
At the edge and a doorway,TX

4 posted 2004-12-03 02:25 PM

hahahahah.. That is all that I have to say about that. Thank you for the wonderful read.

Love,
Ladycat

"Everything changes, everything stays the same."-Bill Austin

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

5 posted 2004-12-03 09:20 PM

I've never had a fear of reindeer before, but after reading your poem earlier, I had this very strange feeling all day that I was being surrounded. (Smiles) Some Great Imagery here. I love it, even though I can't get those stupid reindeer out of my head. -Bob

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

6 posted 2004-12-05 02:15 AM

you gotta let me in on darkness_witch being the inspiration! if she inspired this horror, then she deserves kudos indeed! like bob, i had to come back and chastise you for making those once sweet, innocent, very much anticipated reindeer become a nightmare image that follows me even when awake. you're mean!
just kidding? lol (but did ya have to go and murder santa???)

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

7 posted 2004-12-06 09:21 PM

why thank you! haha i cant believe i inspired such a piece! this one was awesome.. loved the gruesome picture i was getting in my minds eye!

what a trun on the festive season huh!

keep it up!!!

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

8 posted 2004-12-06 10:30 PM

Nice (or not) write, m'friend

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

9 posted 2004-12-06 11:13 PM

Now whats wrong with a little holiday cheer?
lol

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

10 posted 2004-12-24 08:48 PM

yep, had this one on my mind all day too. shame on you purity! i've always eagerly awaited in anticipation santa's arrival, but if he's using those reindeer, jeesh...maybe i'll pass this year. lol.

merry christmas my friend.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

11 posted 2008-12-22 11:53 AM

hard to believe it's been four years since this was posted. freaked me when i read it again, and reminded me why i get so upset battling the crowds for those shreded gifts. a true testimony on commercialism, and a great reminder of the real reason. miss ya on here, purity. merry christmas!

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

pyre
Member

since 2008-05-16

Posts 136

12 posted 2008-12-23 07:15 PM

i had a bit of a make-over. i'm still green_itchy_stuff, just with a different attitude.

my god, at first glance i almost made a stinky mess when I saw this.

it is still a good write.

pyre

lol (formerly known as green_itchy_stuff)

Does she pray, or am I prey?

pyre
Member

since 2008-05-16

Posts 136

13 posted 2008-12-23 07:25 PM

i always thought santa's reindeer had soft & gentle antlers. they would apparently do well at a gwar concert. lol

Does she pray, or am I prey?

Def-init
Member

since 2008-12-03

Posts 186
Toronto, Canada

14 posted 2008-12-26 01:14 PM

Woah, I liked this piece.

"I awoke from a disastrous dream
to find myself standing naked in the snow,
feet frozen where they stood.
Upon further provocation of my senses
I realized I was not alone this blizzardous night.
I was surrounded by reindeer with eyes steaming red.
Their antlers formed razor sharp givers-of-gifts
of the death-not-wrapped kind."

Are my fav lines in your work.
Pretty deep and disturbed.

JenniferMaxwell

Member Elite

since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

15 posted 2008-12-26 01:20 PM

Definitely a very creative and original write.

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