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stevebrklynnyc
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since 2004-01-04
Posts 292
GA, Camden

0 posted 2004-12-01 06:11 PM



I see no color, only grey
Empty from the inside
Another day turns into night
Only to face tomorrow

This damp wet fog follows me
Consuming all that I am
What I once was, is no more
Distant thoughts fade to black

Pain and sorrow fill this void
Relentless attack of my own doing
Persecution, I torture myself
If only I could

The hurt I have caused others
My punishment for lack of sight
I am blind now
Penalty of my choice

If only I could make everything right
Hold a wounded soul once more
Only for a moment
I would gladly give up all

The silence rivals my vision
Only to see
Memories of what could have been
I wish I could see again

© Copyright 2004 Stephen Capp - All Rights Reserved
News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
1 posted 2004-12-02 10:29 AM


Absolutely Awesome!
This one was heartfelt
through & through...

(& oh so colorful!!)
I think you're discharging yourself
from your own penalty quite nicely!!
& I think we're all a little guilty here...

Great poem!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

stevebrklynnyc
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since 2004-01-04
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GA, Camden
2 posted 2004-12-02 12:30 PM


Thank you for your kind response.  Moving on is harder than I ever imagined.
RSWells
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Posts 2533

3 posted 2004-12-02 12:50 PM


Well you seem too young to be going through the same angst that I am but there it is. Trust that it is to your advantage that you display a conscience and sensitivity towards those you may have slighted in the past. It bodes well for your future.

As far as color goes, I learned we are all shades of grey, neither black nor white. Some more charcoal and others a lighter slate. Know too that the odds are great that we are a better person than it sometimes seems.

Truth, of course, sets us free.

KuruShio
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since 2003-11-18
Posts 110

4 posted 2004-12-03 11:23 PM


well done, the first two stanzas are very well put together. i like the over all feel of the poem.

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