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sgreybe
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0 posted 2004-11-29 12:12 PM


IN LOVE'S WAY:

s I watched beyond the shadow of me
There came a breeze silently
For once in a lifetime an angel appears
Swiftly bearing away tears

To venture out and lose is gain
But never without its untimely pain
When will the light of a shadowy me
Burn brightly for eternity?

Knowing the cycle of daunting rejection
Does the decision even bear reflection?
Sometimes purposefully, sometimes not
Always the same; always another shot

For the life-strings of our purposed lives
Within and around each other entwines
So this the ultimate, age-old question;
A lover's heart in a bound confession:

Do I place myself in love's way?

© Copyright 2004 Sylvia Greybe - All Rights Reserved
sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
1 posted 2004-11-29 12:15 PM


Sorry all, the first "A" of "As" appears to have gotten lost...!

Sylvia

Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind
2 posted 2004-11-29 09:49 PM


I really like the structure
and flow of this poem.
Not to mention I really like
the presentation of the message.

Thank you,
Jen

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2004-11-30 11:51 PM


I agree. This flowed extremely well, and I could relate!
Nicely done!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

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