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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-11-26 04:40 PM



Maybe my sight is short and blind
Maybe I'm obsessive
And maybe there is a large weight tied to my heart
With thick chains

The abrasive prayer seems to be the one
Most promised
A deluxe toy dangling over my head
Just out of reach

I'll grab it
Jump
Let the hand lower
And when it did my toy was inside a steel cage
And the lock didn't even need a key
More of a jigsaw puzzle
And if I sit and stare long enough...

Check for loose bars
Small notes out of place
Maybe something was fashioned wrong
A trapdoor?
He gave me the keys
And there isn't a lock
And if I sit and stare long enough...

The cables still attatched to my cage snap
And fall
And land in a way so they coil around
The cage and me in no certain order
But there was enough cable to fasten me to the cage
Still holding the keys

I don't even know how to use these keys
Squares and circles and a triangle
And since I'll be here long enough
I might as well sit down

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head.  Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
1 posted 2004-11-26 05:10 PM


hey, saw you sitting there. mind if i join you?
maybe i can lend a hand as well. i love solving puzzles.
another awesome write, craigy!

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-11-26 05:57 PM


ha i too saw you sitting there in some primitive tribal cage with fire burning underneath you.. oh dear i really do need to stop imagining all these kinds of things..

the poem was really cool, i liked how you did the whole sitting down thing throughout the poem and then finished with that line also. unexpected! great stuff dude

LOR

you're the only one keeping me alive

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
3 posted 2004-11-27 12:23 PM


Thanks guys, and yeah eve, I'd like it if you joined me.  Thanx again.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head.  Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
4 posted 2004-11-29 12:54 PM


What took you guys so long??? I've been sitting here forever waiting patiently for you to come join me in my cross-legged perching...lol
"How doeth I love thy scribblings? Let me count the ways"...

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

NightFall
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since 2004-01-28
Posts 88
The land known as England
5 posted 2004-11-29 12:04 PM


"I don't even know how to use these keys
Squares and circles and a triangle
And since I'll be here long enough
I might as well sit down" i loved this bit, keep waiting, the puzzle will work, cool write hun.
luv NightFall

"My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere.

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2004-11-29 10:26 PM


Then I guess we've joined you purity.  Thanks for waiting.  

Thank you Night.  I'm glad you enjoyed it.  Just seems like life.  

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head.  Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

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