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PainBaneChaos
Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150
The point of no return

0 posted 2004-11-24 08:21 PM


It's what I wanted more than anything.
For you to give a damn.
Nothing mattered,
as long as you cared.
And I thought you did
And things were looking up.
For once in my life
I had a chance at something.
And then it all went to hell.
It only took one word,
and I knew it was coming.
And I told myself I was willing
to do whatever it took,
go as far as I had to.
But it burns me,
every time I see you,
and every day when I know I should be seeing you,
but I'm not.
Every time I pick up a knife,
knowing you'll be disappointed.
Knowing what you'll say,
and doing it anyway.
And I'll take the bus trips,
and I'll pay the phone bill.
And I'll fight.
Will you?

*I didn't bother spell checking it and I'm not going to read over it to fix things, just wanted this out*

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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2004-11-25 12:36 PM


Its a good thing you got that out.  Raw.  Like a thunderstorm.  Nothing can stop moments of unhappieness and disappointment, but nothing can stop moments of happiness either.  Just like a thunderstorm.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head.  Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
2 posted 2004-11-25 06:08 PM


loved it

i bet so many people can relate.

loved the anger and the disappointment and the sadness and all those other emotions in this one.

hope it helped to vent all those feelings

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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