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Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2004-11-21 03:27 AM

I wander aimlessly this earth,
in a state of continual gift horse for-grantedness.
Never able to answer simple with yes
the are you happys of each day,
but unsure of single factors that make it so.
Many things there are to curve my lips'
ends upward that seem less than appealing.
Mental awareness scratched beyond focus
with a solitary wanting...of a furtherance of exchange
of mutual commitment.
Is it improper to offer such importance to only one
facet of a perceived gemstone life?
Demeaning the stained glass beauty of offerings from others
wanting...only for me to make less
the significance of soul mate bliss.
Unfortunately, this magnanimous bliss is the one
gift horse that thus far prances a less intense stride.
Making this life a living hell on earth that,
however much I want...I cannot leave until I either
gain bliss or lose current prance, and die.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

1 posted 2004-11-21 03:38 AM

god how i've been here. depression sucks a big one.
please, please don't lose that current prance, for it is such a beautiful sight, purity.
prance on! this was so good, but so sad. the ending needs your friends to help you rewrite.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2004-11-21 10:13 PM

Purely this is a poem of pure beauty. And at Thanksgiving preweekend. Awesome.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

[This message has been edited by green_itchy_stuff (11-23-2004 10:07 PM).]

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

3 posted 2004-11-23 12:14 PM

You, Purity, are a genius
& one of the truest of poets of our time.
I can't begin to compliment justly.
& from my measly point of view,
it is not improper at all (that which you asked)
I'm amazed. "thusfar prances a less intense stride"...hell on earth. Like Eve,
don't lose that current prance,
for even the Clydesdales are in envy.

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

4 posted 2004-11-23 01:26 AM

Thank you, guys. I appreciate your words.
(Not only in response to my poem, but also the ones you write in your poems.) I am blessed to have such a place to escape to.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

5 posted 2004-11-23 01:47 AM

Didn't really understand till the end, really. But I liked your use of words, and we all got to keep our dancing shoes on!

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

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