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EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2004-11-20 11:38 AM

love is a blade, as well.
it loves to shine so bright, then stick.
it starts out slow, little prick here, another one there.
we know it hurts, but yet we love the self inflicted pain.
we can't avoid its brilliance...we want to hold it tight,
and run our fingers down the razor edge of its length
to finally get to the point.

then stab!

then stab again!

is it still worth the pain?

they say we're all human and die so quickly.
but amazingly, we get stabbed straight through the heart
by that dagger of love,
and yet live to re-live it in hopes it lives to re-live
the love that bears its name.

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i humbly beg your endulgence for posting again so quickly, as i usually would rather spread 'em out a bit more, but i was responding to an email from an awesome friend, and this just came out, so i figured, at the risk of seeming self-indulgent, i'd share it with some more awesome friends.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

1 posted 2004-11-20 09:14 PM

It's funny, even though you come right out and say love in the first couple of lines, it wasn't love that I was thinking, but it made a great analogy.

"World's use is cold, world's love is vain, world's cruelty is bitter bane; but is not the fruit of pain." Elizabeth Barrett Browning

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

2 posted 2004-11-21 03:24 AM

Phenominal poem, dearest knowledge of yourself!!!
I'm reminded of love being the arrow, that flies straight and true...into this fallow heart...
What am I to do? What am I to do?

I guess "re-live" it again until I catch it with my all, or it kills me.

Gosh, I love this, and I'm all too aware that it's name is "You".

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

3 posted 2004-11-21 03:30 AM

IS it still worth it? hmmm i can't figure it out.
I would usually say yes. but at the moment I'm in a particualrly down mood.

this poem is.... beyond words.

all your poems are amazing and you have such a remarkable talent, but wow this one rocked particuarly hard.

love to see your name on the post-board

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

4 posted 2004-11-21 10:33 PM

I would have to say yes, it is worth it. Beneath the "destruction" of the man is the beauty. I almost hate love for the fact that it is painful, but maybe thats why I love. And wow I love you man. You're awesome! The poem is awesome too.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

5 posted 2004-11-21 11:17 PM

"we know it hurts, but yet we love the self inflicted pain.
we can't avoid its brilliance...we want to hold it tight,"

how true that is...

this was just...i mean all your poems are awesome, but this one...was just that extra notch up from the others.

-Kurst

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

6 posted 2004-11-23 12:07 PM

Oh yes, Michael!
This was fantastic!!
& I also loved the lines Vampiana quoted!
But, then again, I loved them all.
So well done!
From prick to stab!!
Yes, it's worth the lessons learned, for then
you write a poem like this, but, the real dagger of love will be so much more beautiful remaining always in the comfort of its sheath... and no more sticks, pricks or stabs.
Greatness.

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2004-11-25 12:48 PM

This isn't a response to the poem, its a response to News' response. The dagger remains in its sheath, wow. Thats beautiful. Like saying if I wanted to I could ruin your entire life for my advantage and gain much, but then I wouldn't have you. Wow.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

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