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vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
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Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-11-16 01:34 AM



Do you think I'm beautiful?
I want to ask, as I stand before you.
My dark locks tumbling over my shoulders.
Do you think about me at every little moment?
I wish to ask, my dark eyes
Dancing back and forth watching
Your own eyes and taking in the
curves of your face.

No, of course you don't
My elevated heart, thunders back into my chest.
Ordinary in the worst way to you
Not a second do you spend agonizing
over things shared between us.

Damn you, for not loving me
like I love you.
Damn you, for not thinking
of me, like the hours you drift through
my mind.
Damn you, for making me feel ugly,
worthless and oh so pathetic.

I just want you to make me feel beautiful,
Even for one day.

*I don't like it*

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-11-16 01:42 AM


Me thinks I should've stopped me speaches a long time ago...
This was so real to a certain situation of mine that I have carried with me for so long.
Excess baggage, I now know.
Here's what we do Vamp... Instead of damning those who are a few pages back in the same Book of Love... we must bless them. Sounds like a pile of dung, I know... but, we bless them for showing us that which we are not. We know love. We are a few chapters beyond them in the book. It hurts like Hell itself... but it validates the truth in our love, right????
!@#$%^&*()_+{}":?><
Your poems get to me. And I fight back hoping what I believe will see me through the same dung you are going through.
Another memoir I'll keep.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17
Posts 150
The point of no return
2 posted 2004-11-16 04:37 PM


I feel the frustration, but no one has the right to make you feel worthless or pathetic because you're not.  It took me a really long time to figure that one out myself.
Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
Posts 326
Wandering
3 posted 2004-11-17 01:18 PM


This has a wonderful flow. You painted a very clear image and stayed with it in style and context. Good job, thanks for sharing.
Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
Posts 326
Wandering
4 posted 2004-11-17 01:18 PM


library!
EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
5 posted 2004-11-18 12:43 PM


how does one make
that which already is?

(beautiful)

mike


i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

iwontdrownagain
Junior Member
since 2003-10-04
Posts 39
Massachusetts
6 posted 2004-11-18 02:22 PM


vamp, I feel the pain in this poem more than I've felt in any poem I have ever read. it is such a terrible thing to deal with, knowing someone doens't feel the same or think of you as often as you think of them. Great write.
Parmonie

"The green of your eyes
That you get from your father
Shows your personality,
Such a young girl with an equally
Young and foolish heart."
~Lynn M

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
7 posted 2004-11-30 06:24 AM


this is another beautiful poem..... you always write such beautiful poetry, you get into the head of so many different people amd write what they are feeling as if it up on a screen for you to watch..... this is another that completely relates to me.... well written  girl.
keep them coming
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
8 posted 2004-11-30 02:15 PM


yes, except that the screen i watch is my life.

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

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since 1999-07-05
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At the edge and a doorway,TX
9 posted 2004-11-30 06:56 PM


"Do you think I'm beautiful?
I want to ask, as I stand before you.
My dark locks tumbling over my shoulders.
Do you think about me at every little moment?
I wish to ask, my dark eyes
Dancing back and forth watching
Your own eyes and taking in the
curves of your face"
---------------------------------------------

I remember days like this. I don't know why you don't like it, but I love it. As a matter of fact I would love to add this to my library. I know what this pain is like and soon, just like every other pain in life,it will pass. I'm sorry for your pain, but not for your writing. Keep writing and I will keep reading and sympathizing with you.

Take care.
Love,
Ladycat


"Everything changes, everything stays the same."-Bill Austin

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
10 posted 2004-12-01 08:03 PM


DAMN HIM!
omg, BUTIFUL

i loved it

LOR

you're the only one keeping me alive

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
11 posted 2004-12-01 09:58 PM


(eidted-profanity-Ladycat)hey...this was sooo good. I can relate soo much right now, and it sux...i know how you feel exactly. DAMN all of them. heh. Yeah...i feel better.

Great poem tho. Im saving.


I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

[This message has been edited by Ladycat (01-13-2005 03:42 AM).]

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
12 posted 2004-12-29 12:37 PM


damn you for making me feel ugly

I love that part.
I love this poem.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
13 posted 2004-12-30 01:57 AM


I think this refers back to my old sig.  Eccleasties 3:11, "He has made everything beautiful in its own time."  And I don't think I spelled Eccleasties right, oh well.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

angele
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since 2004-01-09
Posts 35
Malta (tiny island in the Med)
14 posted 2005-01-01 11:20 AM


great.you encapsulated feelings many feel but few can express
Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
15 posted 2005-01-12 08:16 PM


This was great. AWESOME job.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

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