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curiosity kills |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA 
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little kids playing by the highway at night, broken glass looks pretty when the light hits it right. tires squeal... their story ends as broken but not as pretty. i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
GEEZ! I didn't see that coming! (I guess neither did those little kids) This was dark, Eve. Ouch. Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
It's the same as people, when you are shallow. Look pretty, but not so pretty nature. Check twice before you cross the road, left, right. And ladeda. Weird mood, neutral. Like Purity says, Ouch! can't think fo anything to say to describe the beauty and scary factor of this poem, so I'll be boring and monotonous: Graet Poem Eve! Sure is good! Hollow. Courts. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
Good write, the imagrey is quite well done. |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
Dark for sure, maybe there is a lesson learned here. Good post. |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Man, there are so many four letter explicatives I could add "ing" to to use use as adjectives to describe how (insert one here) great this was. I think the shock value comes in how short this was But yet how matter of fact the point. Sharp as shards or broken glass, Eve!  Rider "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
that was cool. Reminds me a little of Death Cut and Quiet. -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
says a lot in short sentencing. well done. |
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