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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-11-12 02:56 AM



I stopped caring today
I hung my head
And I faded away.

Everyone went transparent
They raised their heads
Smiled,
I couldn’t bear to watch.

Their eyes seemed hollow,
The laughter strained,
It hurt,
This was so normal,
Another day at the playground.

See I stopped caring today
It scared me
But that’s all I’ll say.
To you anyway.

I shedded that girl,
And now this skin is thin,
And now I lost my strength,
See I couldn’t lift my head again.

I stopped caring today.
And yesterday,
And the day before that,
And now I fear tomorrow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

© Copyright 2004 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
1 posted 2004-11-12 03:52 AM


oh courtz...that was so so so so good. wow...another stunner. I loved so much aye.
"I stopped caring today
I hung my head
And I faded away."

lines of pure brilliant poetry were contained within this poem. awesome write

lots of love,
Kurst

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
2 posted 2004-11-12 10:13 AM


it's ok,courts, as their hollow eyes will burn out in time. until then, i'll hang my head with you.
great poem!

michael

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
3 posted 2004-11-12 08:01 PM


"I stopped caring today
I hung my head
And I faded away."


Such an opener to a poem...great write, although its sad.


~Alli~

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silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-11-12 08:49 PM


oh

my

god

courts

that

was

so

sad

and

powerful.

i

loved

it

LOR

your the only one keeping me alive

PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17
Posts 150
The point of no return
5 posted 2004-11-13 08:20 PM


Beautifully aching.
green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2004-11-13 11:18 PM


Yeah, it sounds awesome.  Like being satisfied unsatisfied.  Or maybe even a little numb.  lol.

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head.  Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

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