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Sir_Vampire
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since 2007-06-12
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Johannesburg

0 posted 2008-01-21 03:03 AM



An echoed whisper, a silent shiver
Repeating the words that make you quiver
You ask yourself how you could be so blind
Why the message in my words you couldn’t find

You blame yourself for what I now have done
I swear I heard you cry when I steadied the gun
The barrel aimed at me, the bullet killing you
Your heart was mine, I’ve killed you too

You couldn’t see yet my message was so clear
You wish you could see beyond your fear
Now my message is clear for all to see,
As with my final breath I whisper “remember me”

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

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shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 247
inside the shadows
1 posted 2008-01-22 06:11 PM


Wow...all I can say is wow.  That's a great poem.  The words, the flow, everything was amazing.  I loved when you said

"The barrel aimed at me, the bullet killing you"

It just had such meaning into the poem.  As if their hearts were both one.  Great write, definatly going in my library.

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