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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I havent written anything in awhile...i hope u like this..please reply..even if you think it sucks. lol Change My world is changing, Its swirling in a haze Everything melts together I'm told its "just a phase" I fight for what i know, though im told by quite a few, that what im wanting isnt what i know, it is what i knew. Too many nights remembering, has confused be to no end. No longer are they memories for i've confused reality with pretend. So i keep fighting for what i know, Ignorance being bliss. I love him with all my heart, how i long for one last kiss. Kissa.... please reply..thnx I ask why, but in my mind, |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
i really really liked it. very well written. and the rhyme flowed well too, didn't seem forced, it fitted into a good rhythm. really liked it. and it kinda describes one of the many things i'm feeling at the moment. good write. Kurst "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is beautifuk kissa.... really well written.. i ahvent been able to write anything for ages either... but you have come back with something beautiful... your writing is true from your heart and to me that makes it beautiful... if you put too much though into something then it just looses all its quality... well done gal... keep them coming live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
You know it is said "Of all the things we try to find, it's only love we keep". This was a great poem, k~r! And if this person is gonna kiss you, then the philosophy here is "Kiss me like you mean it!!" Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
"though im told by quite a few, that what im wanting isnt what i know, it is what i knew." never listen to them, kissa~rachelle. faith the size of a mustard seed can move you and what you want a whole lot more than what they say. you just gotta believe it with every ounce, and you can will anything into existence. good one! i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"So i keep fighting for what i know, Ignorance being bliss. I love him with all my heart, how i long for one last kiss." Loved that ending. It's good to see you posting again. I've been in a writer's block for quite awhile..lol.. Anyways, great write, like always...keep posting!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
thnx guys...i know i havent posted in awhile, i jsut havent really had much to write about...well, i have, but it was to hard t write about it... anyways, thanks for replying. Kissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
Well done kissa !! ~myheart~ |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
beautiful stuff Karissa. I love how you write! have definitly missed your stuff. keep them coming love and empathy darkness... Sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
it really describes me so much, and that isn't the only reason why i loved it. it was so well written! You have a way with words thats for sure! the rhyme was never forced, im so impressed that you can do that. AWESOME! LOR your the only one keeping me alive |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
"My world is changing, Its swirling in a haze Everything melts together I'm told its "just a phase"" I hope you don't stop writing again, I really love your work. It's beautifully written. Great work Kissa! Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Change Is Hard, Beautiful Poem... Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy... |
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WranglrButts9 Member
since 2004-10-24
Posts 108Iowa, US |
This is the first time i've been to Dark Poetry, but I'm glad I read yours first! It not so much reminds me of a guy, but until the end, it reminded me of my dad- who is never there. Bailey Good judgment comes from experience, |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
This is so beautiful - I love the way it rhymes ~*~peaceful~*~ "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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