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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-11-02 06:55 PM


You are not
The world to me,
And when I see you,
I do not stop breathing
I laugh at you,
When you turn your back
And nothing I say
Makes you smile.

You hate me
Everyone knows it
And also
I hate you.

Nothing you did insulted me
Nothing you did hurt me
Nothing you did annoyed me,
And nothing broke me in half.

Everything I did back insulted you
Hurt you. Irritated you.
Everything I did back broke you in half.

If you got close to me, I’d scream.
Tell you to get away,
Plus many other useless adjectives
That made you close your eyes,
And cry.

I hate you so much.
But I can’t really claim,
That I thought of that saying myself.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

© Copyright 2004 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
1 posted 2004-11-02 11:09 PM


wow..this had some powerful anger in it. i can't help but be curious as to who its about.
good write.
enjoyed it.
love,
kirsty

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
2 posted 2004-11-03 12:43 PM


hmm very interesting

hehe you little angry one, you!

loved it, very different to your others!!!

you should be proud

love and empathy always
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

*Alli4000*
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3 posted 2004-11-03 04:33 PM


awesome write...such emotion!

~Alli~

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EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
4 posted 2004-11-03 10:11 PM


you stand strong there, courts!
good angry poem!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
5 posted 2004-11-04 12:15 PM


I don't think it's about anyone I know. If someone I know feels like this because of me, I would feel soooo guilty. But no, it was sparked by a book I, and Sophie (used ur name!) read.

The quote I think was:

I would say I hated her, but if you asked me, I don't think I could have told you why.

Anyway, thank you for the replies.
Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
6 posted 2004-11-04 06:04 AM


this is seriously hwat im going thru right now at school with one of the guys..... this is really creepy actually... hehehe well written..... keep hem coming...
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
7 posted 2004-11-05 11:45 PM


I think the whole thing is wonderful, and such a testimony to my state of being "all out of love" at the moment, but the last eight lines were truly, truly inspiring. I remember why this ol'soul always listens to Air Supply. Each new song they come out with speaks of exactly where my heart is...
and so does each of your poems.
Thank you.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
8 posted 2004-11-06 04:55 AM


oooo nice courts!

i knew you'd love that book...... grr you used my name!!!!!!!!!!!!! but hey, I just used it in a reply to one of my own poems.

love how you always seem to get inspiration from anything..... i envy it!!!

woah just read the poem again! ahhh you never cease to amaze me (teehee)

love and empathy always
darkness...............
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
9 posted 2004-11-08 07:08 AM


So Much Anger, I Could Feel It, Awesome Write...

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

WranglrButts9
Member
since 2004-10-24
Posts 108
Iowa, US
10 posted 2004-11-14 10:31 PM


Nice emotion. I really liked it.

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

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