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vampiana
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Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-11-02 01:48 AM


Across the table
from me.
I watch your
silent tears
making a slow route
down your face and
onto the paper before you.
Your heavy sighs drenched
with sorrow.
Your friend died
this morning.

I sit watching, feeling so
helpless. What can I do?
But then my mind
selfishly wonders
would anyone cry?
If I were to die.
Would I recieve the same
reactions.
My heart wishes yes like a
strained beat of hope.
But my mind tells me no,
you're just not the sort of person
people would cry over.
Instead nonchalant shoulders
shall be shrugged.
Maybe someone will whisper
"Kirsty's gone.."
Most wouldn't even
Notice.


"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

© Copyright 2004 Kirsty - All Rights Reserved
aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
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1 posted 2004-11-02 07:13 AM


i knew these thoughts all too well 2 years ago when one of my best friends from wen i was a kid died....  she was the white to my black and she always helped me through the toughest times..... dont remember the fights you have had, remember the good times, it gets easier after a while, but you never forget them, they are always with you and someone will notice you if your gone.... there will always be someone who notices things like that.... friends, family, secret admirers, they will all notice...

ne ways.... this was a beautiful poem in a very dark way andd reminded me of something i need to do in the next couple of days, thankyou... keep the writing coming
always remember someone will notice if your gone
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

spritrider87
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since 2003-05-31
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2 posted 2004-11-02 12:43 PM


this poem has hit a chord in my heart. I too have wondered if anyone would cry if I died and everytime I have come up with the answer of no. I don't think they would notice. But I also know that it will affect people in some way so I don't worry too much about it. Some one will notice. I would notice if your writing stopped. Your writing means alot to me. Keep going.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

yv
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 574

3 posted 2004-11-02 05:21 PM


Vampiana, what an existence we live in when we believe our last bout of silence will be all that is left of our existence.  This was beautiful poem and it hurts to read that so many people feel as I do when I rest my head atop my pillow at night.  Keep dreaming that things will be okay and they will...trust me.

Yv

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
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4 posted 2004-11-03 12:46 PM


im sorry but i cried again when I read this one again. im sorry bot THAT french lesson.

i hated reading this, it hurt way too much. I can't believe this is me talking, me thinking these things, i don't recognise myself anymore.

amazing poem, really powerful and you got your message across really well.

keep going, have faith it will get better.

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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5 posted 2004-11-03 04:37 PM


"But then my mind
selfishly wonders
would anyone cry?
If I were to die."


I've actually wondered that before. Like a kid at a nearby skool was killed and like everyone was so sad and had all these candlelight things for him and everything, and I couldn't help but wonder if anyone would do that if i died.  


~Alli~


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*Alli4000*
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6 posted 2004-11-03 04:40 PM


Just like me...I forgot to click the Add Thread To Library Button
*click*

silhouetted
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7 posted 2004-11-04 01:02 AM


id cry.

heaps.

this 'thing' that happened has really changed the perspective of high schools around the shore lately... scary for the chicks in my class who knew her.. they were so shocked. makes you think.

but i would cry, dont think i wudnt

awesome poem

put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus

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