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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-10-24 01:16 AM

I’m crying now,
Better be careful, or,
I’ll be known for just that trait,
Not my charming, funny, joking,
Personality
I’m crying hard,
Everything seems so sad,
Ever wondered why I knew everything,
And I’ve never seen more than you?
I suppose,
I’ve, just been further,
Ventured to that side…of life.

And everyone’s tellin’ me,
They know better,
Yeah, everyone’s an expert,
On the way I should live this life.
Yeah, maybe I should listen,
Maybe I should listen,
But I’m better at blocking my ears,
And seeing.

I’ve been crying for awhile,
Would bang my head against the wall,
But I’m afraid,
Someone would see the dent.
I should wipe my eyes,
Because like coffee in the morning,
It stains.
But I’ve been crying so long,
Your shoulder’s had enough,
And it wants to return to you.
Why won’t you let me return with it?

Because you hate me,
Because you hate me,
You tell me enough,
I’m hated.
But if you really want the answer,
You’ll see, you only hate the shield,
You only hate the shield I use
To block out
The warmth and sunlight

In the end,
I’d really rather,
Like to be known as the cryer.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

1 posted 2004-10-24 01:40 AM

"I should wipe my eyes,
Because like coffee in the morning,
It stains.
But I’ve been crying so long,"

another beautiful poem by Courtney.V
this ached, it really ached and sighed, heavy with the emotion you imparted into it.
loved it.
L&D, KIRSTY or KURSED <--lol at that every time, don't know why though?

anywho...another amazing poem

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-10-24 01:50 AM

"And everyone’s tellin’ me,
They know better,
Yeah, everyone’s an expert,
On the way I should live this life.
Yeah, maybe I should listen,
Maybe I should listen,
But I’m better at blocking my ears,
And seeing"

This poem is absoluly amazing...i can just feel all your emotion. And know that your not alone, because I can relate.

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

3 posted 2004-10-24 08:47 AM

Deep, Emotional, And GREAT Poem, I Loved It, Especially This Part...

"Because you hate me,
You tell me enough,
I’m hated.
But if you really want the answer,
You’ll see, you only hate the shield,
You only hate the shield I use
To block out
The warmth and sunlight "

I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~

Much Luv,
~!~"Trina"~!~

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-10-24 10:52 PM

yeah i can relate too.

stunning poem, beautiful in a weird twisted way

really great write

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

5 posted 2004-10-25 07:43 PM

another beautiful poem.... i love your work and these are my favourite lines... i know this all too well also....

I’ve been crying for awhile,
Would bang my head against the wall,
But I’m afraid,
Someone would see the dent.
I should wipe my eyes,
Because like coffee in the morning,
It stains.
But I’ve been crying so long,
Your shoulder’s had enough,
And it wants to return to you.
Why won’t you let me return with it?

keep them comin.....
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

6 posted 2004-10-25 09:59 PM

This is beautiful. I noticed twice that you have invoked a very difficult license to pull off... Two lines that stand alone very well, but also that allows the second to finish the thought of the first at the same time...That is awesome; I always love to do that...
"I’ve, just been further,
Ventured to that side…of life."

"But I’m afraid,
Someone would see the dent."

Great job, Hollow!

Love, Purity

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

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