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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2004-10-23 02:40 AM


We're at our best when we're at our worst;
Our attention span spans when it's us getting
To display our weaknesses trampled upon.
He said, She said, Did you hear about?
God, that's so awful...
I know, but at least...

Funny, my editor hates the three dots thing.
I say it's a poignant pause...(lol) a caesura.
She says it's improper english.
What do the English know about being proper?
The most proper thing I ever heard an Englishman say
Was "Let's drink 'til Ireland is in our backyard".

There you go, dot dot dot, truth!
We love to get intoxicated to unbridle the tongue.
Love to get burned to ignite a fire of sympathy,
For in sympathy, we radiate ourselves.

I wrote a book today:
69 sheets of empty pages.
My editor loved it for the lack of ...s.
It'll be a best seller for the misfits, I assure.

Now the denoument...
"What's the clarity? Meaning in all this?
Do you have a point that you can consisely make?"

If I did, and if you did (dot dot dot)
We wouldn't be a family of misfits explaining
Our confusion of it all...

...right here.

LOVE YA!


Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

© Copyright 2004 Carrigan Chantz - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2004-10-23 10:41 AM


Yeah pretty much.  Getting into aggravating spots is actually kinda cool for poetry and art, but at the same time it sux to go through it...  lol.  

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

2 posted 2004-10-23 11:08 AM


...!



Enjoyed.


*Alli4000*
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3 posted 2004-10-23 07:45 PM


Purity...I loved this poem.

(and look, i love the three dots too.  look at any poem/post i've made and you'll have seen them there...lol..)

~Alli~

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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-10-24 12:38 PM


Now, that, Purity, was awesome. Loved it lol. Made me laugh too, I am a big fan of dots!!! I would do more than three, but microsoft word, tells me more than three doesn't work.

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
5 posted 2004-10-24 01:31 AM


that was soo cool...i to love the three dots...they are just so awesome...like your poem...
lol...
i'll stop...i'm overdoing it...ok...now i've really killed it...
awesome poem!

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
6 posted 2004-10-24 08:55 AM


Wow, It Was A Great Read, Nicely Done, and Everyone Likes Dots Every Now And Then...

I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~

Much Luv,
~!~"Trina"~!~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
7 posted 2004-10-24 09:08 AM


ahahaha point well taken, fine writing.
TexUS
Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228

8 posted 2004-10-31 07:16 PM


Saw the title, and thought, hhmmm, do I want to take a chance?  Glad I did, because this was awesome! I'm a dot-sot-dotter too, and I just...LOVED this!


EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
9 posted 2004-11-03 10:19 PM


awesome!...
several themes within a theme churnning here until it makes you...
liking it here, purity!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

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