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Discarded, Rejected, The unwanted friend
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Discarded, Rejected, The unwanted friend |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
*sorry, tis long, but it needed to be said, so please read it anyway and bear with the length* I've yeilded to your power, Through out these past two years, Always wanting peace Calm oceans straight ahead. But as soon as things were rocky, You turned your back to me, Not willing to attempt a go, At making these things better. Instead I ran around, Carefully picking up the turmoil You created. Always saying "sorry" For the fights you to created. I have gashes running up my back From all the times you've stabbed me While you stood there Cuddling close, to the boy that Once was mine. Still I stuck it out, "Through good times and in bad" Seeking your approval, Always granting you mine. And then one day I wake to find, A "happy" little reminder, That you Want nothing to do with me, For always and eternally. How do I react? When someone whom I truly loved Sharpens the rusty blade Of rejection and stabs Me one last time. The fragile world, I Worked so hard to keep Together, our friendship Over, in a couple of Words, administered By you. I was just your little puppet, You were just stringing me along, You never really liked me, I was just Some temporary solution, until You could Discard me in the trash With the rest of your rubbish. My back still an open gaping wound, The red blood seeping and staining All the rest of the memories You would rather Forget. "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
wow that was truly amazing kirst. The raw emotion in that one really hit hard, and every bit was so carefully written but without the effort and it was amazing. she never deserved you. everything you wrote there however isnt true, i do believe she used to find you very much a best friend. just not lately. dont forget what you had. wonderful... im off to read the other. i didnt notice the length. LOR put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Oh god, Kirsty.....I feel what your saying. Brings back memories of primary school. The bad memories, cuz there was good ones too...I guess. I'm sorry this pain is real. Mais tu est sympa et bien. French test went to my head. Friends can be the greatest and...the ones who hurt you the most.... Maybe when I can think of more things to say..I will. But right now, I must MUST reread. Didn't notice the length either. Hollow. Courtney. xxx I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
sad cant say anything new so yeah ill kept it short n simple really really good poem, felt the emotion n was hard to read nice loveandempathy darkness  nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sharpens the rusty blade Of rejection, you said it all right there V . . . powerful vent [This message has been edited by littlewing (10-21-2004 03:53 PM).] |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
beautiful, amazing, painful, know how you feel... she doesnt deserve a friend like you if she is going to treat you like absolute _______ dam those rusty blades hurt dont they.... i as well as everyone else that would read this would most likely know the feeling of being stabbed in the back... you have put all your emotions down in this poem beautifuly. your are a talented writer and i am constantly becoming more envious of your work.... keep them coming girl... keep your head high and words flowing Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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