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~K~
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since 2004-07-27
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0 posted 2004-10-16 07:45 AM


1.

The fever rages
before release comes.
We are forever altered
my mortal gestures.

2.

I cared so much
the first time;
enough to burn
the feeling from me.

3.

Still my knight rides.



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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
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Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-10-16 10:40 AM


You, ~K~, have a rare and beautiful gift for talent. This was so nice. I loved the form! Unfortunately, I am all too familiar with the world's pedestal of chivalrous solitude... still awaiting my shining armor's return, someday.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
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2 posted 2004-10-17 09:53 AM


U R AMAZING !
(Humbly bending on one knee...)
Will U...

Write more for me,
Please! (Smile)

...and repeat from beginning

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

*Alli4000*
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3 posted 2004-10-17 04:07 PM


First off, I just gotta say how much I love the format of this poem.
~K~, you have such a gift for writing poetry.  This poem was awesome! Keep posting.

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
4 posted 2004-10-17 11:04 PM


"Hopeless"

never

always a pleasure to read you

green_itchy_stuff
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Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
5 posted 2004-10-17 11:14 PM


Yeah, just melt away, and let it flow.  I tried something I've never done before and read all the posts before I read the poem.  They're all right.  U R AMAZING.  

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

darkness_witch
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Posts 516
Underneath
6 posted 2004-10-18 03:16 AM


There is nothing I can say, that somebody has already said better.

unbelievable talent is what you are!

proud to have you among me in these blue pages


love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

littlewing
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7 posted 2004-10-18 07:18 PM


the ever longing quest for happiness . . .
I do adore your writing, K.

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