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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-10-14 11:27 PM


Shatter the reflector,
And sweep the shards?
Or rip off the face,
And tame the blood?
World-wide phenomenon,
Thousand cracking mirrors,
Fragments dodged and faces unpainted,
Or passing by horror,
One hideous expression,
Eyes covered and pity felt.

“What’s wrong with her?”
“The wind changed.”

“What’s happened here?”
“The wind blew too hard.”

Tired of this mask,
Want to see what’s behind?
Maybe the veins are like rivers,
The flesh, like sunsets,
Maybe behind this,
I’m beautiful.


Sorry, moment of self-loathing.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

© Copyright 2004 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-10-14 11:32 PM


Sorry be you NOT!!!! Hollow, for this was fantastic! You really did an impeccable job of crafting this one from start to finish with the greatest of wordings and lines... (and we all know the beauty is there!)

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
2 posted 2004-10-15 07:13 AM


i may not know you personally but you personality shines through in everyting you post. you are beautiful and think to yourself whenever you feel liek this 'why am i upset? is it because of someone other than myself? (if it is someone else) why do i care what they think of me? its my body, my life and i will do what i want...
this is a beautiful poem and very well written ... something that every one will feel at some stage through life
well put courtney
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

~K~
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since 2004-07-27
Posts 148

3 posted 2004-10-15 08:13 AM


No maybe about it baby. Like everything, beauty is as it does.
vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
4 posted 2004-10-15 04:39 PM


wow...this was so brilliant. wow..i loved it..absolutely immpeccable (did someone else say that alredy?)!! and you are beautiful..inside and out

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
5 posted 2004-10-15 06:30 PM


Thank you everyone. My mood changes often these days, and this poem struck me when I was down. Thanks so much anyway.

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

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