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peaceful_dreamer
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since 2003-04-25
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SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

0 posted 2004-10-12 01:24 AM


Holding back – afraid to see
That it only takes one word
To ruin everything.

In just a few seconds I can fade away
Just like sunshine on a rainy day.
My burning memory turns to ashes
And I am left with nothing.

Tearing up – afraid to bleed
Knowing now that you meant more to me.
Tears fall – Douse the fire
My word ruined everything.

A few seconds more and the world is gone
I'm running away to leave it all behind.
You're begging me to stay –
But you know I've made up my mind.

Secluded. Deep in thought,
Trying to remember why.
Was running - now I'm caught.
Stuck in a burning world of sin.

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

© Copyright 2004 Jennifer Pederson - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
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1 posted 2004-10-12 09:15 AM


Jenn.,

God, you know this came right from me own head . . . I tell you . . . carry this around too long and your back will start to hurt.

Much Love, I understand too well.

Sue

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
2 posted 2004-10-12 09:32 AM


ditto!
to what littlewing said...
to what you wrote...
i, too, ruined everything.
nicely written poem!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

*Alli4000*
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3 posted 2004-10-12 04:32 PM


"It only takes one word
To ruin everything."


I can really relate to these lines, and I think that this poem came outta my head as well.
Great write...

~Alli~

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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
4 posted 2004-10-12 08:59 PM


Great poem! I can relate, indeed!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
5 posted 2004-10-12 10:54 PM


Wow.. i absolutely loved this. I could relate, and it was just so beautiful....

Just WOW! Anyways, i reall;y loved this, i will be looking for more fro, u!

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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