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southern sweetheart
Junior Member
since 2003-12-28
Posts 18


0 posted 2004-10-11 10:47 PM



tonights my final night
write out the note and kiss you goodbye
im sorry im leaving
i didnt mean to make you cry
you were always my best side

your smile could always make me smile
even on the worst of days
i'll remember yours if you remember mine
you were always my best side

remember i loved you
and know that im always there
you always have a hand to hold
even though you might not care
you were always my best side

its time to end this now
nothing more to say
other than i love you and goodbye

© Copyright 2004 jamie - All Rights Reserved
EveGnosis
Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
1 posted 2004-10-11 11:35 PM


so very sad, southern sweetheart. and yet so very familiar to me. i'm goodbying right there with ya! nicely done!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2004-10-12 09:05 AM


Oh Good God, I will be feeling this one for a very long time:

im sorry im leaving
i didnt mean to make you cry
you were always my best side


Could have come from my own mouth.

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2004-10-12 09:19 PM


Thank you, sincerely, Southern Sweetheart! This was a beautiful poem, and I so love the title phrase, "You were always my best side". Excellent!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

ben_pelling
Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 59
Isle of Wight UK.
4 posted 2004-10-12 09:36 PM


Truely amazing, this one actually made me cry.

I love it.

Ben.

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2004-10-13 01:09 AM


oo wow.

sad very sad. i too love the title name.

really really good.

it teared me apart when i read it.

keep them coming

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

southern sweetheart
Junior Member
since 2003-12-28
Posts 18

6 posted 2004-10-13 03:13 AM


awww thanks you guys
i posted a new poem its called the story check it out if u like this one u might like it too

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
7 posted 2004-10-13 06:35 AM


this is beautiful....
silent tears streakin my face right now.
keep ones like this coming
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

News_From_Nowhere
Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
8 posted 2004-10-13 09:55 AM


"I didn't mean to make you cry"
Why don't I believe that?
As I sit here crying
Over this one as well.
Another beautiful, beautiful poem!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

PeaceInEverything
Junior Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 31
Ohio, United States
9 posted 2004-10-13 06:25 PM


My favorite part:

"your smile could always make me smile
even on the worst of days
i'll remember yours if you remember mine
you were always my best side "


This poem is such a wonderful articulation of my own situation... I hope it does not end the same.  I feel deeply moved by such wonderful writing.

Tears fell for this poem...  Thank you.

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