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silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-10-07 04:27 AM



We used to be real
everything we did was something to believe in
what do we have now?
pathetic attempts at sensitivity?
i wish everything was fine
wish everything had a purpose
like it used to
i just want everything to be
like it used to
i want everything back
all the passion
all the pride
i want you to just open your eyes
and see that everything isnt the same
everything isnt how it used to be
everything wasnt this shallow
this narrowminded
this cliche
just not how it used to be

all i have left
are lies of what used to be
forgotten messages
that tell me how much everything used to be alright
and your face
tells me of how much i used to have

we used to be okay

*different. very different. just trying a different look upon things.... also cuz it was a scool project.

put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus

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Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-10-07 10:00 AM


Well, you get an AAA+++ for this project! Again, I find myself in the "I've been there" category.

"everything we did was something to believe in
what do we have now?
pathetic attempts at sensitivity?"

Perfect lines!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
2 posted 2004-10-07 04:55 PM


I am wiht purity, great wtrite, and i have definetly been there.
Actually i am there right now. Everytime i think back to the "good times" it makes me so sad, and happy at the same time. Happy they happened, and sad that they ended....

Beautiful write hun, i really like it.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
3 posted 2004-10-08 12:02 PM


You made me cry with this piece. Somehow you stole the key and unlocked my mind. I can't belive how....beautiful and real and true and close to home it is. Bloody hell Lor, this came from the heart. I want to hug you. Keep it up love.

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2004-10-08 04:19 AM


wow

dude this rocked.

umm i fully agree with courts n purity n Karissa on this one.

We used to be real
everything we did was something to believe in
what do we have now?
pathetic attempts at sensitivity?
i wish everything was fine
wish everything had a purpose
like it used to
i just want everything to be
like it used to
i want everything back
all the passion
all the pride

believe it or not im in this situation at the moment and omg it sucks soooooooooooooooooooo bad.

ive wanted to cry over it but i couldnt, but then i read this and woah the release.

thanks a huge amount for that

in the words of an amazing, yet rather aged, woman...........: "keep it up love" - Agatha Agnes Rose
did i make ya smile? i hope so.

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
5 posted 2004-10-08 05:45 AM


god, i loved this. as always...
you write such beautiful poetry..
i agree with everything everyones said too..
good job!
Kirst.

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

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