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News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

0 posted 2004-10-03 02:44 AM

You've got two choices
Pull the string now
& I disappear
Ball it up for later
& i just become frayed.

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2004-10-03 10:07 AM

Thats kinda like two people that are totally disgusted with each other. One has murder in their heart and its only a matter of whether of not to do it.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

2 posted 2004-10-03 10:47 AM

OUCH ~ This ultimatum begs for salvation from something a bit too stringy. Clever, but again, ouch...

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-10-04 01:38 AM

Wow....

I like your poems.
They always seem to question....things.

Hollow.
Courts.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-10-04 03:57 AM

i like

i agree with everything said here, and I agree with Hollow on how your poems question things.

great write from a great poet

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2004-10-04 08:02 PM

nice job, it is so difficult to power up a lot of emotion in so few words.

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

6 posted 2004-10-09 11:07 PM

Again, thanks.
And Littlewing -
I'm trying to learn from the best!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

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