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Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2004-10-02 09:37 PM



Okay, I lied
Don't look so bruised
as if you didn't know the rules
as if betrayal and deceit
were something terrible and new

It took too much
to be your bitch
and quiver, constantly
at the end of your whip

That leash you call your love
(and made so much of)
never fit

And yeah, I know
it's all my fault
Since you would NEVER stoop
so low

And all these daggers
in my back
are not mementos
of your brutal blows
which fell so hard
they broke my heart
and all my bitter, brittle bones

It's only a tragedy after we bleed.
Your pain doesn't count 'til it's stained the sheets.

© Copyright 2004 Shay D. - All Rights Reserved
Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-10-02 11:18 PM


I, too, have been the doormat (you used a much more poignant word [kudos for the candor]) for the aide in someone else's necessities at my expense, and then been labeled the bad guy. I applaud your expressionism in vivid, yet very poetic detail, and I'm not trying to make you feel good, I'm just telling you I liked it! (grin)

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

News_From_Nowhere
Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
2 posted 2004-10-03 12:30 PM


Momentos reminds me of how I used to pull
the heads off of all of my sister's dolls
and put them in our fish tank.
We had more heads in there then fish.
You just have to cherish those momentos!
I take being called a bitch a compliment,
as it means I've done something worth noting
with explicatives. Good poem!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2004-10-03 11:03 AM


Now that is dark news!?!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2004-10-04 07:47 PM


and this is to wish those daggers removed . . .


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