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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-10-01 11:10 PM

A waxy sliver of freedom slides out of the sky
Cough cough and choke choke
A little more and I'll croak

My mechanical hands provide me with plenty of guilt
An airplane with a vertical autopilot
But I'm not finished yet

With flesh that's hanging loose, reality peaks open
My blood has a dirty soot resinating from my soul
When shaken this relaxes and rests back in place

A smooth realization breaks aloud the fact
The little girl is so beautiful
She sits and stares straight into my being

Her gaze is so strong that we connect and become one
Connected by facial expressions
I've been influenced

What was once self is introduced to many more
And the vibes start to boil
How do I get out of here

Cough and choke again and spit up a bit, this hurt
Where did I go and what happened
I'm dead to innocence and ready to rot

He has control and a plan, you can almost hear sanity flee
Plans of this broken me confused
Baldhead with no control

They tell me to shut up and that I'm a looser
I agree and know better
But shes still the serpent

Purity
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since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

1 posted 2004-10-01 11:19 PM

Asbolutely loved the first three lines...kinda for me a poetic sardonism...
The "theys" are so fallible...and ignorant. Agree in jest, but not for too long, friend. A unique write, indeed. Luckily, "she's" not a problem for me...

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2004-10-01 11:28 PM

Yeah that is lucky because she doesn't exist except for a part of my imagination. lol. And the they's are so old its surprising their still around here to bother me.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

Purity
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since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

3 posted 2004-10-02 11:31 PM

"But I'm not finished yet...." LOL

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

4 posted 2004-10-03 02:11 AM

i got caught up in the "what was once self is introduced to many more" line. when you work in the eye of the public,there are few things that you can hide to call your own. your life becomes a transparency, and the overhead projector is lighting up the world with your life, like it or not. whom i choose to share me with should be my own, not introduced to the "many mores". i really liked this one, for i think i don't like some of the same that you don't

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2004-10-03 08:58 AM

I think I'm working on a totally different page than I guess it would first appear. But I like your interpretation and that is true. Actually that could be a poem all itself, if it isn't already. lol.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

River
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since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

6 posted 2004-10-04 01:58 PM

funny how for a moment I wished this was about me and then realised I didn't, lol. groovy

-River

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2004-10-04 07:30 PM

Yeah that would make you a parasite of some type. lol.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2004-10-04 08:12 PM

the important thing is that you see all of this . . .

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

9 posted 2004-10-04 09:48 PM

Wow..this was great, but very confusing. I dunno, all i know is that there wre parts i understood, and parts i didnt.

I liked it either way though. Very compelling write.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

10 posted 2004-10-05 04:43 PM

Yeah. Thank you both. If it was confusing I'm sorry. Its basically about trying to escape something that doesn't really have an exit, but then again it kind of does. lol

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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